This is for my Creative Writing Club at school. We're working on imagery, and our prompt was to write about something descriptively but NOT reveal what it is. I'll just go ahead and say, it's about a person's smile, and that person being someone the speaker loves. (Hence the title, 'Beloved's Smile') Tell me if you could've guessed what the poem is about if I hadn't told you what it's about! We'll be working on this for a few more weeks, and I need all the help I can get! Some verse, structure, and flow improvement is greatly appreciated, since I only concentrated on the descriptiveness. xD Thanks for reading! :]
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Pure as snow,
untouched by the footprints
of shoes or plants coming through
the ground, searching for an escape.
Ridges as the side of cliffs-
indentation, each of them different
on every individual one.
Tracks lay on the land
for two years, they will be
destroyed soon, sadly.
I love the colors that
change, such as the leaves
in autumn.
They will be bare soon,
but more beautiful than ever,
when you beam them across the
room, radiating happiness onto others
Your light making up for the blown
fuse box in the corner
Needless to say,
I doubt I'm the only one whose
stomach is invaded by swarms of
butterflies when I see it, feel it-
the light that can melt ice and
put me to ease, give me comfort
Yet, your reasons are just as pure
and genuine as my reason
for returning it.
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