Gentle Kiss

4 posts
User avatar
rayhutch5
Gender Female
Points 1325
Reviews 57
Fri Jun 17, 2011 5:17 am
rayhutch5 says... · Fri Jun 17, 2011 5:17 am
Spoiler
Decided to try out some poetry for the first time outside of school. Hope it's not too awful. Let me know what you think!

I can't get you out of my head,
Your scent still lingers on me
I can't keep you out of my heart,
Your beard scratches my cheek

I hear you all around
As I lay on clean, white sheets
I feel your heart beat close to mine,
Your warmth radiating through me

Please tell me I'm the only one
Or else my heart would break
If you were to love another,
My soul would surely ache

Open up your heart to me
Because you're not alone
And please, remember I too am at risk
For my heart was your's with one gentle kiss
"Everything has beauty, just not everyone sees it." -Jen Meyers

Quote




User avatar
Alliaaryn5665
Gender Female
Points 2383
Reviews 67
Fri Jun 17, 2011 5:38 am
Alliaaryn5665 says... · Fri Jun 17, 2011 5:38 am
Hi,

Congradulations! For the first time outside of school, that was quite impressive! You should continue writting.
This stanza:
"Please tell me I'm the only one
Or else my heart would break
If you were to love another,
My soul would surely ache"
That was just beautifully written! Good job!

Farewell,
A.
You think you are any different from me,or yourfriends?Or this tree?If you listenhard enough,you canhear every living thingbreathing together.You canfeel everything growing.We are all living togethereven if most folksdon't act like it.We all havethe same roots,and we are allbranches of the sametree.
Quote




User avatar
Tarshni
Gender Female
Points 1040
Reviews 7
Fri Jun 17, 2011 7:49 am
Tarshni says... · Fri Jun 17, 2011 7:49 am
wow...
i have to say this but poems that involve love move me.. the possible heart ache as well as the beauty of love itself... I love when both sides of love is used in one poem.. its a contradiction of something that will always contradict itself in life.. really beautiful peom!
By Tarshni Chetty
"The Art of writting is defined by one's ability to imagine and believe in the beuty of words"
Quote




User avatar
AmiiLightwood
Gender Female
Points 1028
Reviews 20
Fri Jun 17, 2011 1:17 pm
AmiiLightwood says... · Fri Jun 17, 2011 1:17 pm
Wow!
I love this - it's short and sweet and very moving. The ending is fantastic!
Brilliant work!
AmiiLightwood.
'You've gotta sing sometimes, like you don't need the money,
Love sometimes, like you'll never get hurt,
You've got to dance, dance, dance, like there's nobody watching,
It's gotta come from the heart if you want it to work.'
Adam Brand, Come From The Heart
Quote

4 posts


Cheat your landlord if you can and must, but do not try to shortchange the Muse. It cannot be done. You can’t fake quality any more than you can fake a good meal.
— William S. Burroughs