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"This is our decision, to live fast and die young... Yeah it's overwhelming, but what else can we do? Get jobs in offices and wake up for the morning commute?
The models will have children, we'll get a divorce, find some more models; everything must run its course!
"This is our decision, to live fast and die young... Yeah it's overwhelming, but what else can we do? Get jobs in offices and wake up for the morning commute?
The models will have children, we'll get a divorce, find some more models; everything must run its course!
Hi! Aww...poor you, no reviews! Never fear...OK, so, yes this looked 'real cool'. I had no idea what you were going on about, quite frankly. I guess it's just one of those uninterpretable pieces of modern poetry. I really don't have anything else to say. Good effort on presentation... If you're willing to explain further, PM me...I'll gladly listen! ~ Amelia
Hi there Bolshevik. Lavvi in to review for you today.
Nice formation of the poem. Must have taken a bit, eh?
I really thought this was a good concept and you executed it extremely well. However, near the end of the sort-of inverted triangle, you had "0"at the end. I don't really think that was needed and it feels like you just added it there... =/
Interesting, though, having it about death. And the title suits well.
