any kind of constructive criticism would really help, also anyone got any ideas for a title?
Day's brightness has barely passed
And the shadow already holds it's sway
Within my veins and blooded heart
But despite it's warmth I loathe the day
For every wind bears her sweet breath
And every cloud her form becomes
No, better night and better death
As coldness my skin will quickly numb
And darkness hides those clouds from me
Behind it's morbid livery
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