Fighting for love

Searching is different from waiting.
If you want something bad enough...
...you will fight for it,
and kill upon its revenge.
You will search sea upon sea and hell upon hell,
You will die in the midst of searching.
If you are willing to die for it, it's worth wanting.
It's worth anything and everything in your life.
If you find this something.
- better yet someone - There are no worries and no fears,
no doubt and no tears.
Sure love hurts...
but in the good way.
Love is priceless. Love is free, yet you fight to keep it alive.
no money can buy love,
only your soul.
Waiting is a lazy act.
If you want something bad enough,
you will fight for it. <3

Choppy, but gripping. I'm not crazy about the punctuation you used here, but that's just about all I have to critique you on. It's very deep, and the length and flow of this piece is perfect. Keep up the good work, I hope to see some more of your poetry.
-Alex

I agree with 322sivart, this is a very well expressed poem, but the punctuation errors unfortunately take some of the shine off of this piece. Perhaps capitalize the rest of the poem where it's appropriate, and add some commas/semicolons somewhere as well?

Other then that, I really liked this overall!

Thank you for the advice. It will help me with my next poem.

I liked it as well, but I also agree with the other two comments.... Keep writing. It was good!

I really like this. It's all completely true as well. My favorite line is

There is no worries and no fears, no doubts no tears

Hey, TheNewHero here to review your poem. I'm not really a poetic type so my review won't be too awesome, but I do have a few things to say. The others have said stuff about punctuation etc. but you haven't done anything. I assume it's because you don't know what you're meant to do so... here - your poem 'properly' written (let me say though, I'm just using proper spelling and such because you said you agreed)(I'm also going to employ the technique of capital letters at the start of each sentence, but it ain't a must):

Added or Edited in Red

Searching is different from waiting.
If you want something bad enough...
...you will fight for it,
and kill upon its revenge. [Remove the apostrophe in it's - that meant kill upon it is revenge
You will search sea upon sea and hell upon hell,
You will die in the midst of searching.
If you are willing to die for it, it's worth wanting.
It's worth anything and everything in your life.
If you find this something.
- better yet someone - There are no worries and no fears,
no doubt and no tears.
Sure love hurts... [Remember, it's three dots and not two]
but in the good way.
Love is priceless. Love is free, yet you fight to keep it alive.
no money can buy love,
only your soul.
Waiting is a lazy act.
If you want something bad enough,
you will fight for it. <3

In my little town, for some strange reason, students use the term 'breaking George' to describe a grammatic mistake. You should go through your poem and see how many instances of 'Breaking George' you've made. The fifth last line is one of them.

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Alright, nit-picking done, let me just say that this poem wasn't very... personal. I would appreciate it if you listen to me seriously. It is very hard to make a personal poem and this poem doesn't have to be 100% you, but it is way too easy to write a poem that anybody can copy & paste somewhere else. Make this poem your own. How can you do that? Well, basically you need to make your poem more... Georgified

I understand you are 13 and you are a beginner writer, but it's better to start early. First of all, read more poems and write many more, get your punctuation/grammar/spelling better and better each time. But that comes after...
... discover a technique.
If I had to read poems on YWS that did not indicate the author, I would definetely know which ones were Persephoneia's, and her poems have a physical style at that. She just has a certain way of writing out her stanzas and such. What you need to do is to pay attention to the audience you are writing for. It will give every individual poem a style until you develop a style that seems to flow through your poetry.
In addition to the above, try and use certain techniques. Maybe your teacher might tell you not to use them unless you understand them well, but forget that. We won't criticize you, especially not if you indicate that you're trying to use, for example juxtaposition (usually contrasting two lines in a poetic context).
Try not repeat. Unless you have a very clever plan up your sleeve, if you are essentially saying the same thing in a different metaphor then the reader of the poem tends to skip it. Some people write poems to the value of 1 stanza. Not necessarily like a haiku, but when they make simple statements they become more powerful because they are less hidden. This entire poem can be explained as one metaphor (doesn't have to be). I feel that would have made it more powerful and a more direct thing.

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Sorry if I overwhelmed you, but you said that you were wondering what a review is like. This is typically how I review works. Thanks for reading this. I expect you to edit, man, because it's really hard to review bad poetry... in other words: awesome job.

Thanks for the great read,
Promise not to let things slip out of my hand,
TheNewHero.

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P.S!

Spoiler

I just realized how this should be more potent. This is a suggestion, not a writing tip - use a first person narrator and have a very clear image of what happened to the poet. It may make the poem more inspiring. For example, maybe he misses his child or something.

I am totally confused...I have NO IDEA what most of that stuff means...