Young Writers Society

Lost in my thoughts,
Fighting, searching.
Long have I sought,
for a way of loving.

No matter how I try,
No matter what I do.
I cannot seem to find,
I cannot speak to you.

Cannot share my feelings,
In a world so cold.
My heart has been sealed,
Or so I’ve been told.

hmm...sounds like the lyrics to a linkin park song.

i like it.

My heart has been sealed,
Or so I’ve been told.

best lines, i think. again, you have an excellent poem and it's dark in it's own way. i want ti know, KJ< what does this mean to you?

Wow, I love it. The flow is really good and the rhyming is exquisite. You can really write poems well, KayJuran

Meshugenah wrote:i like it.

My heart has been sealed,
Or so I’ve been told.

best lines, i think. again, you have an excellent poem and it's dark in it's own way. i want ti know, KJ< what does this mean to you?

its sorta about when you know you are
loved by someone and you don't know
if you can love them back, lack of emotions
or something... im not sure... does that make
sense?

anyway thanks everyone for all the comments
- it really give me a load more confidence when
i hear what people think!

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All I can say is...I agree with everyone else. You do write poems very well! And it was very inspiring, to say the least.

no, these are the best lines:

No matter how I try,
No matter what I do.
I cannot seem to find,
I cannot speak to you.

you sure are good...

Love it really do
all gooood :thumb:

thanks you guys!!!

if anyone wants me to look at
their poems then just ask cause
ive decided i need to look at other
people's more...

cool...well, first of all, I have to write some more poems?

i thought it was too general and so i couldn't feel anything for the narrator which made the poem meaningless. it also feels like i've seen something like this too many times.

I like this poem too!

I cannot seem to find,
I cannot speak to you.

Umm. ...cannot seem to find what?
Probably dumb question, but I'd rather just say it than sit here and think about it.

I'd probably have worked the line "My heart has been sealed" in one more time, cuz I like it
Cool! Good job!

-Amice-