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cjscoot
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Mon Dec 13, 2010 11:05 pm
cjscoot says... · Mon Dec 13, 2010 11:05 pm
I'm thinking of writing a poem from this. What do you think?

Sometimes,
I sigh.
Because I feel a connection
When I look in your eyes.
But no words escape from
Between our locked lips.
Yes, you know who you are.
"You. Are. Not. Leaving. Me." Ian O'Shea, The Host.
Perseverance is failing 19 times and succeding the 20th.
Do not go where the path may lead; go instead where there is no path, and leave a trail.
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Butterfinger
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 12:08 am
Butterfinger says... · Tue Dec 14, 2010 12:08 am
This is definitely a good start toward a poem. Anything written has the potential to be poetry, it all depends on how you work with it, mold it and shape it into something more. Of course, this alone could be it's own, but that's up to it's creator. Keep writing!
If you want to be a great writer, don't think about what you're going to write, just write it.

I'm a huge fan of writers block! When your brain halts, with no direction for where you should go, it gives you threads. All you have to do is pull and unravel the story you're meant to write.
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 6:44 pm
elephantwalrus says... · Tue Dec 14, 2010 6:44 pm
Hi there,

To answer your question, go for it! You could totally write a good poem based off of this encounter/experience/thing. The only part I would change would be the "You know who you are" line. If you don't plan to show this poem to that person, then no, they won't know who they are. See what I'm saying? If you cut it, the poem will be more accessible to all readers.

Let me know when you finish it! You have a good start. Good luck!
My main project until Script Frenzy is an experiment using blog posts between four characters as episodes of a common story. You can read this work as it progresses at http://knowallchronicles.blogspot.com/.
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