To My Guardian Angel

AsxLoversxGo wrote:At first I was getting annoyed with the spelling errors and then I noticed that you had said they were only for style. Then the poem suddenly got sadder.

It shows how close people are, the nicknames they have for each other, the inside jokes. WHen someone's gone you can't have that anymore.

LibbyLovesDrumswrote:

AsxLoversxGo wrote:
At first I was getting annoyed with the spelling errors and then I noticed that you had said they were only for style. Then the poem suddenly got sadder.

It shows how close people are, the nicknames they have for each other, the inside jokes. WHen someone's gone you can't have that anymore.

Aww thanks dude.
& Yes when you lose somebody, it's completely different.

kikialicia31 wrote:

LibbyLovesDrumswrote:

AsxLoversxGo wrote:
At first I was getting annoyed with the spelling errors and then I noticed that you had said they were only for style. Then the poem suddenly got sadder.

It shows how close people are, the nicknames they have for each other, the inside jokes. WHen someone's gone you can't have that anymore.

Aww thanks dude.
& Yes when you lose somebody, it's completely different.

I'm sorry that you lose somebody. But try and go on. Don't let your past 'tied' you up until you can't move forward. I believe you understand what I mean. And keep writing because it can help you stay calm.

Keep moving forward,
Alicia

LibbyLovesDrums wrote:"Cuz this & Cuz that," wit yo all blue hat. being the Angel

God needs you too be. Yeah? So now i see, Listening too Gucci, Or Boosie,

watching Kat Williams,or Angel, or human being

Jonathon Lee Deere

i know you'll always be right beside me

So see you later, i Love you boy.


-Always, Libbster.

jDawn wrote:Hey Libby! I just wanted to tell you that I love this and I'm so sorry! Something I'd use to describe this wonderful poem is beauty with an edge. But sad all at the same time. You see Libby, you have a talent for that! ; D

LibbyLovesDrums wrote:"Cuz this & Cuz that," wit yo all blue hat. being the Angel

God needs you too be. Yeah? So now i see, Listening too Gucci, Or Boosie,

watching Kat Williams,or Angel, or human being

Jonathon Lee Deere

i know you'll always be right beside me

So see you later, i Love you boy.


-Always, Libbster.

Personally, I adore that part above! I actually started tearing up, and I usually don't cry real easy. Anyway, that's pretty much all I have to say except goodbye and again I'm sorry, you're in our prayers and I have read your other poem and that's so pretty as well! : D

- Jessica

Jonathon Lee Deere i know you'll always

be here,

here for your family, here for your friends but

most importantly here 'til the end. i That should be capatalized know

you'll always be kicking it with me, des, daisia, lando, &chey The first letters of the names should be capatalized .

Damn boy you was a funny guy. a gee on

the outside This is something that made me actually tear up. Your slang reminds me so much of my firends. , straight soldier on the inside.

Remember that you added a period. You have to cap. this shit feel like a dream you know what i mean?

Same here. this shit can't be true! Jon boi gone?

Never that you'll always be here

somewhere near , when i need somebody to talk too

i know i can just call you and you'll be there for me,

when i'm in need. damn boy you was a soldier Try a period here you

can never be gone you've been through too much, but no

matter what your gonna be right beside me saying

"Cuz this & Cuz that," with yo' all blue hat. being the Angel

God needs you too be. Yeah? So now i see, Listening too Gucci, Or Boosie,

watching Kat Williams, Angel, or human being

Jonathon Lee Deere

i know you'll always be right beside me.

So see you later, i Love you boy.


-Always, Libbster.

imaginemymind wrote:Hey Libby here to review (:,

I must say I really liked this. The slang & spelling errors give it voice, they make it feel real. It has so much emotion behind it and I am very sorry for your loss. The poem actually reminds me about where I'm from, about my friends and, I must say I did tear up a little. Which is saying something because I'm not an easy crier.
I liked the structure but I think you could use some punctuation. Sorry I know this isn't that important considering the meaning of the poem, but I'll go ahead and show you where I think you could add somethings :

Jonathon Lee Deere i know you'll always

be here,

here for your family, here for your friends but

most importantly here 'til the end. i That should be capatalized know

you'll always be kicking it with me, des, daisia, lando, &chey The first letters of the names should be capatalized .

Damn boy you was a funny guy. a gee on

the outside This is something that made me actually tear up. Your slang reminds me so much of my firends. , straight soldier on the inside.

Remember that you added a period. You have to cap. this shit feel like a dream you know what i mean?

Same here. this shit can't be true! Jon boi gone?

Never that you'll always be here

somewhere near , when i need somebody to talk too

i know i can just call you and you'll be there for me,

when i'm in need. damn boy you was a soldier Try a period here you

can never be gone you've been through too much, but no

matter what your gonna be right beside me saying

"Cuz this & Cuz that," with yo' all blue hat. being the Angel

God needs you too be. Yeah? So now i see, Listening too Gucci, Or Boosie,

watching Kat Williams, Angel, or human being

Jonathon Lee Deere

i know you'll always be right beside me.

So see you later, i Love you boy.


-Always, Libbster.

Sorry for that. I actually feel insensative for picking out those. But your only big problems are capatalization. I's need to be capatalized & so do the beginning of sentences. I obviously know that you know that. But even if it's a poem you should do it.

LibbyLovesDrums wrote:

jDawn wrote:Hey Libby! I just wanted to tell you that I love this and I'm so sorry! Something I'd use to describe this wonderful poem is beauty with an edge. But sad all at the same time. You see Libby, you have a talent for that! ; D

LibbyLovesDrums wrote:"Cuz this & Cuz that," wit yo all blue hat. being the Angel

God needs you too be. Yeah? So now i see, Listening too Gucci, Or Boosie,

watching Kat Williams,or Angel, or human being

Jonathon Lee Deere

i know you'll always be right beside me

So see you later, i Love you boy.


-Always, Libbster.

Personally, I adore that part above! I actually started tearing up, and I usually don't cry real easy. Anyway, that's pretty much all I have to say except goodbye and again I'm sorry, you're in our prayers and I have read your other poem and that's so pretty as well! : D

- Jessica

Geeesh Jess!
Your freaking reviews make me tear & I don't cry easily either! LOL
Your just so nice. Thankss for telling me that though! The things you say means alot :)