death

Death
that’s the most simple word,
the most simple thing a person will go through
death is thought a punishment
But no…not really,
it’s a simple but careful thing
most don’t deserve to die,
but if its for the right cause
its worth it
they’ve done their part,
they’ve lived their lives,
don’t fear death
but embrace it

Ok, this poem was slightly weird. I felt like it was more like a sort of comment rather than a poem. I get what you're trying to say and it was a good message. However,

britishwannabe wrote:Everyone says death is hard! Horrid!

I think a lot of the things you've put in such as this one could be added more eloquently, in a more beautiful way. Maybe you could personify death? Carry out your message in a way that's not so 'on the surface' if you get what I mean?

britishwannabe wrote:Sure most don’t deserve to die, but if its for the right cause then its ok, they’ve done their part,

I feel like this part doesn't flow very well and could be rephrased.
Hope i've been of help
God bless you

I love the subject and perspective, but poetry is taking something like what you've written above and stating it eloquently, and making it flow. I really hope to see a revised version of work, and I look forward to reviewing and reading it as well. Best of luck to you.

This was sort of short and to the point, but the use in punctuation was poorly writing and so was the capitalization. But it was unique in a way and for that I like it. For a few little adjustments :

britishwannabe wrote:Death
that’s the most simple word,
the most simple thing a person will go through.
Death is thought a punishment...

Let the reader me edged on by the words, by pausing it and not letting it run on all at once. Keep writing!

Hey, hey! Shadow here! OK, there was one thing I found that bothered me.

britishwannabe wrote:Death
that’s the most simple word,
the most simple thing a person will go through
death is thought a punishment
But no…not really,
it’s a simple but careful thing
most don’t deserve to die,
but if its for the right cause<--On this line, "its" needs to be "it's"
its worth it<--I found the same mistake here too.
they’ve done their part,
they’ve lived their lives,
don’t fear death
but embrace it

That was the only mitakes I saw! I loved this, because it is so true, and you got your point across with it.
It didn't really flow, but not all poems have to flow. This is really good, and I enjoyed reading it!
If you need anything else reviewed, shoot me a PM,and I'll take a look at it!

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