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Trying to find myself

Fatimah · 2010-07-06T16:46:36Z

Everywhere I go, I don't seem to fit in; I feel self-conscious, In the places i'm in. Eyes see me, They guess i'm a certain way; Their thoughts then change, After what I say. I'm uncertain of my feelings, And afraid to even speak; When I say what's felt inside, I end up feeling weak. I now realise, I've been untrue to myself; I've been faking my emotions, Hurting everyone else. Moments I feel one way, The next I feel another; My mood switches, Fluctuations like the weather. I respond to those feelings, Which are not real; Those who matter, Are left with pain to heal. Before it's too late, I need to find me; Then for once and for all, Decide who I want the world to see.

kogarasumaro143

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Mon Jul 26, 2010 12:57 am

kogarasumaro143 says... · Mon Jul 26, 2010 12:57 am

Fatimah wrote:To kogarasumaro143,Changing the line you suggested does sound better, as I did aim to emphasise the fact that eyes are watching me. I think I may change it but I've not decided if I am going to submit the re-draft with the changes.. If I do I hope you review my edited poem again

Oh sure I will... Just follow me and my YWS page http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/page.php?id=107.. Leave me a message there if you have a poem that you wanted me to review... thanks...

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