Like Bears

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Like Bears
By Amber Morrell


Don’t go to Boston, it’s too cold there.
The wooden roofs meet at a point
a triangle above two metal grates
aiming at white overcast that sometimes mists.

A little boy cries—
the mild autism getting the better of him—
when I tell him I’m leaving to my mountain.
Slowly he’s getting over both.

It’s so warm in the valley and he’s
never known snow like I have here,
but I never knew it either until
you went to Boston and I felt the frost.

The frost clings like a ghost, to my
bootstraps and the soles of my twelve-dollar
‘poor people worker shoes’ from Wal-Mart,
so affectionately deemed by my mother.

Even if they’re not dead we talk about old friends
like they’re six feet under,
discussions we never had, secrets we never shared,
contemplating advice they’d give us if they were still here.

A little girl cries—me this time,
the smallness of a nanoparticle getting the better of me—
when you tell me your accomplishing your dreams.
I was getting over both, but my mental shield is now defunct.

So don’t go to Boston, it’s too cold there.
You’ll feel the chill of the slush turning your toes blue,
grasp at the old feelings we never talk about like they’re dead—
I retort: it’s hibernation.
"Everything was beautiful and nothing hurt." -- Kurt Vonnegut, Slaughterhouse-Five




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I love your poem. There is no major changes you need to make.

the soles of my twelve-dollar
‘poor people worker shoes’ from Wal-Mart,
so affectionately deemed by my mother.

I was getting over both, but my mental shield is now defunct.

These are my favorite lines. I am looking forward to reading more of your poetry. Have a great day.Fiction




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Thank you very much. :)
"Everything was beautiful and nothing hurt." -- Kurt Vonnegut, Slaughterhouse-Five




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Why, I'm impressed. Good job. I love how you described it and I read this like a true poem. It flowed and I understood it to a point where it wasn't extremely vague but left me wondering. I love it. Keep writing and tell me when you post something new.

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The hardest mountain to climb will have the greatest view. Everything at a different angle: memories serve as double vision, a view from the valleys as well as the precipice. But everything that goes up must come down.The descent from the peak will be twice as graceful & three times as difficult



have u ever noticed how ugly rosy-lipped batfish r? and not like in the “aw ur so ugly ur cute” way that like opossums r — no they’re just hideously ugly beasts that should never have existed and r the epitome of evolution fails. the stupidity, blank look, head emptiness. they’re horrible n everyone who likes them r horrible too. they truly have the worst fan-base >:[
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