First poem. Quite short. Not a haiku.

So what was all that about?
First it was all big,
and then it wasn't.

Thanks anyway.

Hello there. ^^

Well, firstly, you might want to check out YWS' rules - we do ask that you do at least two reviews for each submission you make. In fact, why not introduce yourself?

The more I read this poem (it's shortness is a fantastic quality, as it makes this possible), the more I started to question whether I understood it. And that's great. You're making the reader think and to be honest, there're a lot of interpretations that could be drawn from this. And if the one I'm thinking of is right, then it's certainly a good poem. It's making me laugh.

Anyway. I do like the fact that you don't overcomplicate your poems, but right now you're undercomplicating them. That's not even a word. But regardless, there's no real material in this poem, no content for me to think over and enjoy. Sure, the question and its inevitable vagueness do make the reader think about the scenario - and that's good, so stick with that - but without some more indication of who this might be addressed to, or what is being spoken of to make it interesting, the reader won't really care.

Since it's so simplistic, it's always worth tightening the flow. Throw in some rhymes, and perhaps use a little imagery (metaphors, similes) as a means to introduce a story to us, or create atmosphere - for example, saying something was like the rain would create a rather dreary scene. On the other hand, saying it smiled like a sunflower would give a happier, more romantic touch.

Let's be more specific:

So what was all that about?
First it was all big,
and then it wasn't.

Thanks anyway.

Line #1 is good. It's a question which will inevitably intrigue the reader. By questioning an off-the-scene character, you're questioning the audience, and used wisely this can be very effective.

Line #2 is messy. There are too many short words and they don't do much for the piece. Get rid of the "all". But then we're left with something chapped and dull. The "was" is so boring. I feel as if it doesn't say anything, other than something was big. Little words like this don't excite me - I think that if you replace "it was all big" with "it sprang strong", you're still keeping the blunt aspect but it's more active, more exciting.

Line #3 was pretty much the same story - as good as being blunt can be, this just bores me. It's short, yes, but in the same words you can tell so much more, as I've tried to show above.

And then Line #4 makes a good ending, in my opinion. And think even if you change it in a similar way to I suggested, it will still be humorous - the clash of styles, I think, would work.

But I've rambled enough. I hope I've helped! Do feel free to send me a PM if you want to ask any questions or need help around the site. I'd be happy to help. ^^

Best
Blinky

Thanks very much, very helpful.

I like it.Its short and says a lot in a little.

Uh....*clears throat* Yeah, I mean, what was that all about? I'm afraid I didn't get it at all. Still, I'm not going to say that's a bad thing. It's called ABSTRACT, people.... So yeah, I don't think this really makes much sense at all but I'm not gonna knock it just because of that. I'll just say this: it's a little hard for people to appreciate things they don't understand. Like ME, for instance. I mean, people hate emo children, right? Oh well, I'll shut up now... Keep writing, and always remember that if it's special to you, that's all that matters!!! *big cheesy grin*