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Forget Myself



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Fri Jul 08, 2005 10:22 am
Bobo says...



This poem still scares me because it's so deep...

Chorus:
I just forget myself when I'm up here with you.
No matter what I planned before it, I just can't think things through.
You clog up my mind, and I get lost in the moment!
You are all I can find, because I'm lost in the moment.
When I'm up here with you.

Don't ask my why I said it,
Because I don't know.
Don't ask me why I did what I did,
Because I can't remember anymore.
My brain goes out,
I just breathe in your love,
My mind stops and my heart takes over,
And I forget what's going on.

I think that's the end, but I can't really tell how I have it written down. Oh well!
  





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Fri Jul 08, 2005 3:45 pm
Chevy says...



Perhaps it should be the end. I do think you should repeat yourself sometime...especially since it's a song and it's kind of short. I think it would kinda cool if it were a fast song...

How come you don't put your songs in the Lyric section?
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.
  





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Sat Jul 09, 2005 6:21 pm
Bobo says...



Well, this one isn't really a song. Maybe it is. I'm not sure which place it would belong. I moved my real songs, though. This one might have been a song, but not really.
  








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