I've got to agree. I like the mysteriousness in the poem, but it was a bit hard to follow. It flowed well for the most part though. There's a few blips, but nothing that can't be fixed with a little editting. Nice job.
You must never give into despair. Allow yourself to slip down that road, and you surrender to your lowest instincts. In the darkest times, hope is something you give yourself. That is the meaning of inner strength. — Uncle Iroh
