Technamericana

Edited by the uberly awesome Calleeey! =3

Dance, american girl, dance on the crazy beat.
Pour your soul out on the floor, and dance.
Feel the power of the dj and the beat emanate in
You.

Dance, american girl, dance your worries away.
Nothing else matters now, but you and me,
And the beat. Dance.

Open your mind, let us bathe amongst the stars.

Dance, american girl, spread your wings and fly.
Dance, dance, dance american girl, and
Play. It. Hard. american girl, cause that’s the
Technamerican way.

I really like this, it started it out so-so but it ended up great. The last stanza is my favorite. Although:

Dance, american girl, dance on the crazy beat.

When you said american girl, it reminded me alot of the Tom Petty song "American Girl", and I had that spinning in my head as I read the poem. So, I don't if you'd want to change that but it kind of distracted me from the poem.

Feel the power of the dj and the beat emanate in

You had a really good rythem at the beginning of the poem but then it seemed to stop for me at this line, it was too long.

But this is a very good poem, very enjoyable.

::hugs:: Thanks Hekate I try my est im still a beginner at poems

Side note: I DO know how to properly pronounce Hekate

Shouldn't the A in America be capitalized?
I liked it... But I got really confused... It was.... weird... but... enjoyable? (O_O) *Confuses self and leaves*

Technamericana is an expression I use when it comes to the american clubbing scene. The rave nights are weird dahling, they are chaotic and wild. I wanted to apply the same emotion in here as well...

Capitalize "America"...NOW!

Good, well-written poem. A few rythmical inconsistencies, but I don't know if you meant it that way.

p.s.-I love techno...