second chances

radiatelove23 wrote:now my hearts in a trance
to keep from tearing up
as it collects itself from the shattered pieces

everything was a game
all you said was a lie I really wish you would add some punctuation. But, I like these two lines, they are connected, almost repetitive, but good.
those three words never ment to escape your lips I'm guessing the three words are "I love you"?
stupid me i should have known,Okay, it's fine if you don't capitalize the beginnings of lines, but please, please capitalize I. It isn't that hard to hit the shift button when you type I.
it hadn't been the first time
i took a second chance Good, you made it personal, everyone has taken a second chance in some way or another.
now my hearts in a trance Apostrophe after the t in hearts.
to keep from tearing up This was great, the idea that your heart had to numb itself in order to keep from breaking. It makes the poem very emotional.
as it collects itself from the shattered pieces
you dared to leave it inLove it!
you say you regreted breaking up
i shouldn't have believed you
because here i stand alone once againSurprisingly, this just happened to me.
there was only tears and silence as we were ending Were only.
like we didn't have the chanceChance for what?
you left me without a word and came back I would split the line here and add the last part to the next line.with your heart
in anothers hands
i hope you don't get done wrong It's cute how you hope even after what happened to you. How you don't wish your fate on him/her.
just as you left me stranded on a lonely street
along side a broken and bleeding heartYet, even after saying you don't want the other person to end up like you, you still end by condemning him for breaking your heart. Anyway, this was fantastic, you had a lot of emotion, you were great at telling the story clearly. It was wonderful.

those three words never meant to escape your lips.
stupid me, i should have known
it hadn't been the first time.