Never Again (cyber-bullying)

As I walk down the lane of pain
I look back at all my haters
Wondering how I ever made it past the lies and snares
I stare as you glare in my soul
With your massive threats
I cry as I am cut deeply by lies
And as the days go by I cry in my own world of shame
But then as I look up I see a dream
A dream where no one is hurt
No one is cut by lies of shame
So I get up and stand up
I wipe my wounds
Stare me down and tell me how I can never be
How I can never dream
But shut up and leave
You have no control over me
Everyday I get up and wonder what's coming next
I scream "NEVER AGAIN" shall I go though this
So as I walk down the hall of lies and shameful souls
I lift my head up to the sky
And I Shout "NEVER AGAIN
NEVER AGAIN SHALL I BE PUT DOWN"
By liars and haters who never can be something in life
I realize that
I am God's
I realize that My haters see
They see greatness in me
So they try to break me
They cut me deep and hard
Even though I hurt
I know I'm still alive

I am not going to cut back on my review just because you are my sister. lol. There was a lot of spelling errors and I'm sure if you read over it you will see them. I really loved the depth and passion of this poem. And the way it actually, spoke to me you know? I really liked it, and I hope you like this review, you need to read my stuff, seriously.....

I will read your stuff not tonight because I am so sleepy so I will Tommorw but thank you for the review the next thing I am going to put on here is a sermon so what out I am going to hit this site like an earth quake.

Firstly, I would like to commend you on writing a true, moving piece. I believe it fits the era we live in today with cyber-bullying and how it rages like a wildfire across the web.

However; there are a few things i'd like to point out:

As I walk down the lane of pain
I look back at all my haters
Wondering how I ever made it past the lies and snares
I stare as you glare in my soul and try to care meI like how you make your stanza co-exist with one another through rhymes
With your massive threats
I cry as I am cut deeply by lies
And as days go by I cry in my own world of shame comma after by.
But them as I look up I see a dreamThen?
A dream where no one is hurt
No one is cut by lies of shame
So I get up and I stand uptry to not say I twice.
As I wipe my wounds
It tries to stare me down and tell me how I can never betells me?
How I can never dream
But I tell It to shut up and leave
It has no control over me
Everyday I get up and wonder what lies are to come next
I Scream NEVER AGAIN shall I go though thisLOVE this verse!
So as I walk down the halls of lies and shameful souls
I lift my head up to the sky
And I Shout NEVER AGAIN
NEVER AGAIN SHALL I BE PUT DOWN
by lies and haters who never came be something in life
But them something happens I realize thatthen?
I am Gods I realize that My haters see God's
Whats in me they see greatness so they try to cut meWhat's
They cut me deep and hard
Even though it hurt I know now that never again shallit hurts.
I be a victim to cyber-bullying.

Great job on this piece! keep up the good work!

-dreamer

Thank you so much for the review I have fixed the places where you said I messed up.