My Metaphor

Read cover to cover
To see what lays inside
You will get a story
But can you pick out truth from lies

LIke a metaphor
I am a simile
Similar to abstract
This description is me

Many fragmented fragments
An image of imagery
You can read all I am
And still know nothing about me

Hi! I loved this. Nitpicks:

racingforever10 wrote:Read cover to cover
To see what lays inside - ; - normally, I'm partial to no punctuation in poems, but I do think you need a semi colon here!
You will get a story and a dash here - ...
But can you pick out truth from lies as well as a question mark here - ? -

LI i ke a metaphor
I am a simile -
Similar to abstract :
This description is me

Many fragmented fragments
An image of imagery
You can read all I am
And still know nothing about

Simply beautiful. Stunning. I was listening to a piece of classic music whilst reading this, and it was inexplicably emotive. Amazing... * sniffs *
- Amelia

Thank you very much I appreciate the review...

Well, it was all over the place, and I can't decide if that's good or bad. Not a bad effort, not a masterpiece, but I wouldn't count it as a failure, the nitpicks have been pointed out already, so all I will say is this: Fix the second stanza, I didn't like the simile and metaphor part, yes it was clever, but it didn't really mesh with this poem. Keep Writing!

thank you for the review..

I disagree in part with both of the previous reviews. First, with Amelia: While everything she says is correct, I would dispute the use of a dash in the third line. I personally would suggest a comma.

Second, with Ignatius: I thought the second stanza was quite good. A very clever use of semantics. I would, however, recommend you review the last line of the second stanza; the syntax of the line doesn't seem quite right. Perhaps "A description is of me."?

okay thank you very much for the review...

To see what lays inside.
You will get a story,
But can you pick out truth from lies?

Like a metaphor,
I am a simile.
Similar to abstract,
This description is me.

Many fragmented fragments,
An image of imagery.
You can read all that I am
And still know nothing about me.

I added in some punctuation.

Other than the missing punctuation this is a really great poem! Awesome job on the flow and word structure

Keep writing,
Alzora

okay thank you!!:)

Read fromcover to cover
To see what lays inside
You will get a story
But can you pick out truth from lies?

LIke a metaphor
I am a simile
Similar to abstract
This description is me

Many fragmented fragments
An image of imagery
You can read all that I am
And still I know nothing about myself

Beautiful, a sure epic for all lovers of poems, actually, I'm not a fan of poems, but this made me change my mind. You can surely write!

Though I did edit it slightly.

Congratulations. You explained a metaphor in a metaphor...in a metaphor?

Thank you:)