Smashing Modems

I aughtn't to like you God
I aught to hate your fucking guts.
You've wrecked my life
Killed my dad
You're killing my sister.
I'd talk to someone else that wasn't you
But there is no one else who sits
At the switchboard of life and death
Pulling out plugs and smashing modems
Turning switches on and off
Connecting wires and dragging programs apart
You can't just lose faith if you have it...
It's like having a stalker that walks behind you
He follows me around
And it's faith I hate not you
Because I aught to hate you
But I've never been too reasonable.
You're not exactly helping me out right now
But maybe it's just a test
And in case you hadn't noticed
All this trouble is getting in the way of my mocks
Which I shall undoubtedly fail
Which shall be your fault.
But I still won't hate you...

Very dramatic and it showed your feelings well.

It could have used a rating as well.

How the hell do I rate my own poem? It's not up to me whether it's good or not!

She means a rating as in age guidance. I'll do it for you.

That's mean! I don't want it rated!
I totally don't believe in rating stuff... I mean people are in charge of what they read... I coulda dealt with it at thirteen.


I dealt with it at ten.

Sorry if I offended you or anything, but I didn't mean that I can't deal with it. I can. I'm saying that others younger might not like the fact that there isn't any rating at all and does have a few offendable words.
And yes, I know that people are in charge of what they read, but when they click on the link to your poem, they would have liked to have a warning or something.

And isn't there a rule that it has to be rated?

-*Twinkles

Pieces must be rated if they need to be. Please abide by the rules. If you don't agree with posting ratings, well...too bad. They help protect younger members, and also prevent not so tasteful pieces from appearing on the front page.

Rules - forum/viewtopic.php?t=3

Rule 1 states: 1. If you think your story/poem is inappropiate for some audiences, then leave a note indicating as such at the top of your story/poem.

The note has now been replaced by a rating system to make it easier.

Sorry guys - missed that part of the rules! I'll rate them from now on. Thought everyone here was 13+
you didn't offend me Twinkly Person I just get REALLY het up about stuff. Comes from strange lifestyle and coffee abuse I'm sure.

Yeah I get the rating thing now. Sorry about all that! (i'll delete if you think it's tasteless anyway?)

It's okay, I understand how you feel, somedays I'm grumpy and snap at absolutley nothing.

That's fine - we all get grumpy sometimes

You can say that again.

That's fine - we all get grumpy sometimes

(sorry for post-padding - couldn't resist!!)

Sophie is this meant to be some kind of message because I asked you to the ball?

*blushes* it's so pretty *tries to think of something smart to say* *fails*

Back on the topic of the poem:

I liked it. I thought I wasn't just because of the opening line, but it turned into something different than I thought it would be. And I really enjoyed it. I don't have the brain capicity right now to say anything more than that, but I'll try to come back later and give you something more constructive if you like.