Art

Art is a magical thing
It expresses who we are
It unleashes talent
It shows emotions
It shows passion

We must learn art is a gift
We must cherish the talent
Some people wish for the wonderful gift
Some people misuse this talent with street art
Art should be a visual for the world not street direction.

Hey Artlover2227, my name is CaptianRandom.
First of all i love art and what your writing is right, but some people have different perspectives of art, street art might be that persons passion, so i don't think you should be so harsh on those people, and also street art gives the city a really cool look and effect. but other than that i liked it you could have expanded it. i hope to read more poems to come.

-CaptianRandom

Hello there Artlover and welcome to YWS!

This is very fitting that your first addition has to do with art. This was a very simple straight to the point piece. Even though I feel it could use a little spark and more emotion and originality to make it extra special, I can definitely feel the passion you have on this topic. Just punctuate a bit more next time, you seem to have forgotten your commas and fullstops etc. But good job anyhow.

Looking forward to seeing more submissions from you.

Hey artlover2227!

Hopefully you remember me, I'm RepublicOfCoter and you reviewed one of my poems which I'd just like to say, "Thank You". Now to your poem. I like the idea but the first stanza, I felt, came out a bit wrong and I didn't quite like the repetition (BTW, I don't quite like repetition when something is used again in the next line-I am guilty of doing it so if I sound a bit hypocritical, sue me (lol)). I would have to agree with CaptianRandom's remarks towards street art. I do like street art as long as it is done in good taste and is done legally.

Some people with for the wonderful gift

Could you please rewrite this? I don't know what this means. It needs a little tidying up but it has the potential of being a creative piece.

MWAHAHAHA!
-RepublicOfCoter(ROC)

Hey! Street art is art too, thank you very much! Haha. I liked this poem. It was a bit bland, rather obvious, but definitely full of truth. I would've preferred a slightly subtler tone, but it was good in its way.