Because I'm Gangsta!

*note*
I wrote this in response to the sudden rise in "gangstas" at my high school.
Enjoy!




Because I'm Gangsta!!!

Do you know who I am?
I’m a gangsta!
People fear me because I’m gangsta!
They think twice about looking at me ‘cuz I’m gangsta!
I rob old, defenseless ladies ‘cuz I’m gangsta!
I sell death through drugs on the streets ‘cuz I’m gangsta!
I only hang around dudes ‘cuz I’m gangsta!
And it’s okay ‘cuz they gangsta too!
I have to get local bussas to go for me ‘cuz I’m gangsta!
I gotta let the otha gangstas hit too ‘cuz that’s gangsta!
Without a moment’s hesitation, I’ll kill you! I’m gangsta!
I’ve been to jail and got raped ‘cuz that’s gangsta!
I recruit kids to be gangsta!
I have to obey my leader ‘cuz he gangsta!
He mo’ gangsta than me and I can admit that ‘cuz I’m gangsta!
I get high and drunk ‘cuz I’m gangsta!
I may spend a whole day on the corner for no reason ‘cuz I’m gangsta!
If my guy wanna fight, we all fight ‘cuz we gangsta!
We jump people for fun ‘cuz that’s gangsta!
Well, not really fun ‘cuz fun aint gangsta!
My false sense of inferiority causes me to be gangsta.
My daddy left me ‘cuz taking care of kids aint gangsta.
My mama never cared ‘cuz she was too doped up on drugs from gangstas.
I had no other choice but to be gangsta.
School? Naw! Learnin’ aint gangsta!
I’m stupid, angry, alone, and scared.
I have no direction in life.
I’m so miserable.
The only people that understand me are gangstas.
Wait! What am I saying?
I'm Gangsta!!!

I have to get local bussas to go for me ‘cuz I’m gangsta!
did you mean to spell busses?

That's actually kinda funny.

Every line (except the last five) had me laughing almost until I fell out of my chair! I have the same problem at my school, except they don't say "I'm gangsta," they just try to act like it. This reminded me of my friends when they act crazy, lol.

Haha! *wipes humor tears away*
That was good!
I like everything about it!
Awesome job 3!
Awesome job!
Awesome!

~Lulu

Wow you most be really gansta. lol

Wow. I read the comments first and I was looking for a big laugh. I mean, the humor...it turns to saddness and not really happiness.

Its like they're slowly admitting because that they have problems and they hurt more than they'll let anyone know...

But then they have to take it back, because they have a mask to keep on.

Gold star for you.

This type of poem is very poor and mainstream version of it. It personally sounds more like a song and it just drones on and on. I got bored after a while and skipped to review. It was just too much. You're TELLING not SHOWING! We don't want to know about it like a story, we want to feel the emotion. The senses. You just drone on in a very jaded mainstream rant. Telling us EVERYTHING. First tip on poetry, don't tell all, instead hint and let us see it.

Overall: Too repetive, rather cliche and just plain boring. Choose a goal and focus on it. Rather than just telling us a story. Make us feel the person or narrators emotions.

Good luck
VSN

I really like this. People in my school (especially boys) always claim to be ganstas. And they know their not. I mean how can you be a gansta and still live with your mom or dad and still going to school? They just be talking with though their butts. Back on topic, I enjoyed reading this. Keep it up!

I liked it. Pretty awesome.

You should add stanzas, 'cause when I first saw this I felt,' I don't feel like reading this'
It just makes it easier to read. No matter where you go, you'll always get stanzas or paragraphs in life,books ext.

But I really liked this. Can't wait to read your other stuff.

At first i felt it was being a little too repeatative but after awhile, the repeatative words made the poem more humorous. I liked how you showed the consequences of being "gangster" too. I really liked the line

"I may spend a whole day on the corner for no reason ‘cuz I’m gangsta!"

because it was really funny. I gotta to get my friend to read this because we have a whole bunch of "gangsta" jokes.

ha, ha, ha that was a really funny poem

i hope you aint 'gangsta foe real

cuz if u is i pray for you

anyways if you're not that was hilarious

oh wait sorry was that word to big for your


little 'gangsta mind just kidding

'gangstas are stupid thought we got a couple

of 'gangstas at our school they in BLOOD AND G.E.D

they real slow but they friendly to me i guess since they

'gangsta they got to flirt with sexy girls like me

lol!! no offense i would never join a gang

if you believe in GOD AND LOVE HIM REMEMBER THIS

God is watching everythign you say everything you do

try to change yo ways now drop out of the gangs who

cares if they shoot you cause you'll be the one being sent

to heaven cause God knows you have 'improved

Hey gangsta, wassup? :'D

That was so gangsta! Okay, now you made me say that all the time, you freakin' gangsta. Okay, I'll stop. Now. You know why? 'Cuz I'm gangsta!

No, really, that was awesome. I laughed. And that doesn't happen very often when I'm reading poems. So great job, keep up, you (you know what I'm going to call you? That's correct,) gangsta!

All the best and tears of laughter from your fellow gangsta,
Demeter

I really like this. I love how you described a gangsta in details. This is a really funny, but, yet true poem about the gangsta society. I like the repitition used in this. I know you're acting of a gangsta, but, watch the chat speak.

School? Naw! Learnin’ aint gangsta!

ain't*


Also, you're describing rape, killing, robbing, and other illegal acts. Please rate this R. I hope this helps!

-Rick.

I like your poem a lot.
where it said:

We jump people for fun ‘cuz that’s gangsta!
Well, not really fun ‘cuz fun aint gangsta!

I thought that was kind of funny. And at the end, where it said that he was miserable and stuff, I liked that part, too, because it showed that even though he was bragging about his life and stuff, he really didn't like it. keep up the good work!

I can't stop laughin'. Godd job....gangsta'