This poem is very powerful.
I loved it.
I felt for the person.
I get a vibe that it's a girl though.
So if you want to be more clear if it's a boy.
Thats totally just a suggestion, i like the vagueness too.
It was fantastic.
friendofmike92 wrote:my knees became weak from the sense that my protection is now gone forever
this was a magnificent poem, i really feel for you my friend. my only suggestion is to remove "from the sense that" to perhaps make the flow sound better. read it to yourself out lout a couple of times, just to see if you agree. keep up the good work
The lion is not judged by the method of his roar, but by the pride he carries with it.
What really knocks me out is a book that, when you're all done reading it, you wish the author that wrote it was a terrific friend of yours and you could call him up on the phone whenever you felt like it. That doesn't happen much, though. — J.D. Salinger, The Catcher in the Rye
