Heavens vocal cords

She sings harmonious symphonies
that entrap my heart and soothe my soul
I cannot control my passionate feelings
toward her enchanting role
my ears yearn to hear her
rich and radiant tone.

The happiness that i feel is unlike
any other that i have felt before
sheer bliss envelops my body and
i am grateful to be blessed by her
divine vocal superiority.

okay i like this and it is oviusly well thouhgt out but the fact that it does not have any commers makes it kinda hard to read. i dont like the last line it just dosent seem to go with the rest of the poem. and you should look at that but other wise the use of words is realy good.

I love your style. This captured me right away. And it's short and simple which makes me like it even more. Great descriptions. I think you've got something good here. Welcome to the YWS! Keep writing!

It's good, but I'm not a poetry person, so I wouldn't know much about poetry, but please, PLEASE, capitalize your I's.

A shrink would say that it shows lack of self-confidence, but I know that is shows a lack of grammar!

I liked it. Who's this amazing singer you wrote about? You should do more poetry it really works for you

This is good, but I think it would be better if you capitilized your i's.