Ok i tricked you this isnt a poem but i would like to say one or two things...
FIRST. poetry is a form of expression, not english class. if you genuinely think that a poem flows badly or would be a better work with commas and periods, then that's fine, i guess. BUT please consider that the lack of punctuation leaves the interpretation up to the reader more, and that as the author of the work, maybe i dont want to clearly distinguish between sentences.
SECOND. on the use of cliches - if an image is an obvious cliche - like an apple for a teacher, for example, it is possible to reexamine that image and use it to your benefit. ive only been here awhile but im seeing lots of you totally avoiding use of particular associations (like not using apple and teacher in the same stanza, etc.) because it may be cliched. There are ways to work around, or in some cases, with these cliches.
THIRD. purposes and main ideas - as i said before, poetry is a form of expression. i agree that being deliberately vauge is not always good, and that concrete images are usually preferable to abstracts, BUT i dont belive in writing with a main idea in mind - it almost always ruins the flow of creativity. if the poem ends up being about death, that's fine. dont decide that you want to write about death and then start writing. thats where crap comes from (at least when i do it...) so if one of my works is vauge, tell me that. dont say it lacks a main idea or purpose - it doesnt need one. lack of a solid idea leads to more possible meanings to the work and a more ambiguous poem - it doesnt tell you what to think. it leaves that up to the reader.
THANKZ
ebath
ps. plz dont take offense at anything i say here its not meant to offend or critizise anyones way of writing, or personal style. this is a reflection on my own style and an explanation on why you guys ALWAYS have to tell me to use punctuation/purpose/etc. you can keep on telling me these things but i may not always listen because of what i wrote up there.... and btw im not trying to be bitchy or anything, even if it sounds that way.
thanku
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