Detective Manpuddin on "The Explosive Tomato"

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This story was first posted by my big sister, Solvalery, because I didn't have a YWS account, but now I have one, so I posted it too. :) If you like it click "Like" Thanks!! :D

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Right now I am in a boat to Hawaii, my award for solving an incredible case. Do you want to hear it?

Everything started in the supermarket, when I saw an employee that hided a tomato sauce on his pocket. Walking all nervous, he went directly to the department store and I rapidly suspected of him.

Then, I started to investigate harder. I went to my home-office, I sat on my “thinking chair” and I thought... “Why someone would steal a tomato sauce? I mean they only cost 25 cents,”. Later, I investigated on the Internet, and I Googled: “Things I can do with a tomato sauce.” I learn a lot of things, people use tomato sauces to prepare food, but then I read that in 1944 was the main character of an explosion at McDonald's. “How?,” That's a good question, they put dynamite in the can instead of tomato sauce.

Everybody knows that the criminal always go back to the crime scene, so I went back to the supermarket, and walked really close to the department store. Then, I wanted to go in and two men didn't even let me and kicked me out.

“That was very polite, thank you gentlemen,” I screamed being sarcastic.

Later, I saw the “can stealer” again, he was wearing a green shirt. I thought the green shirt people were accomplices. So I followed the “can stealer” to the grocery store and I watched him greeting another green shirt man. Then I got a little distracted because I remembered I needed a leash for my dog.

“No dog leashes? But they always have dog leashes here,” I said to myself. “That is really suspicious too,” So I sat at the sidewalk and I asked myself “Why are there no dog leashes? And Why are the supermarket employees so close to the grocery store employees? I think they're in this together,”

After that I thought “If they want to explode something, they need someone to rescue them from their own evil plan... DOGS! That means they need leashes, lots and lots of leashes.”

To burst up the hole supermarket they have to have a reason. “Before going to far I have to see what is in the tomato sauce,” and I decided to buy all tomato sauces. I spent $340.25, then I opened them all and I didn't found anything. So I thought the tomato sauces with dynamite where at the department store.

Being totally honest with you I didn't care about spending so much money, anyway I was not paying for it, my boss was.

Later, I thought that the only way to get in the department store was to wear a green shirt, so I went to the mall and bought one. After putting on my brand new shirt, I went back to investigation scene. On the back of the building I saw a yellow ribbon that said “Do not trespass” and then I notice something was shining on the floor... it was gold!

So I walked back to my home-office and sat on my “thinking chair”... again.

“They want to explode the supermarket because under it there's gold. Okay, that part is clear, but why are they so close to the grocery store employees?” I rapidly remembered that when I was a kid I was following the river and it passed right behind the grocery store and the “Dog's school”, that were managed by the same man. “Maybe they are training their “heroes” there,” I said to myself. “That's it! They're trading leashes and dog training for gold!”

I discovered it all, I only had to have evidence to prove it. So without thinking it I ran to the supermarket and go into the department store. Guess what? Nobody stopped me. You know why? They didn't saw me. Anyway, I saw some files in a desk, it was a contract.

“I will trade leashes and dog training for gold.” or something like that... it was signed by, Carlos Jupedrán and Pedro Picapiedra. So I took those documents to the police office and they took care of everything.

When I told my boss, he said...

“I'm really proud of you, Manpuddin!” but then I replied...

“Thank you. In fact you own me the money I spend in the investigation.”

“Good, how much did you spend?” He asked.

“Well, I spend $10 on a green shirt,..”

“Hmmm...”

“And for all the tomato sauces I bought, I spend $340.25,”

“What?? You're fired!” He screamed.

“Okay... You can keep the 25 cents,”

For some reason he didn't like that idea, but he had to pay me the $340.25 dollars and $3,000 for solving the case. Now I'm looking for another big adventure on my way to Hawaii.
Last edited by Manpuddin on Tue Jul 06, 2010 11:17 pm, edited 5 times in total.




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“That was very polite, thank you gentlemen,” I screamed being sarcastically.


Guess what? Nobody stopped me. You know why? They didn't saw me.


“I'm really proud of you, Manpuddin!” but then I replied...

“Thank you. In fact you own me the money I spend in the investigation.”

“Good, how much did you spend?” He asked.

“Well, I spend $10 on a green shirt,..”

“Hmmm...”

“And for all the tomato sauces I bought, I spend $340.25,”

“What?? You're fired!” He screamed.

“Okay... You can keep the 25 cents,”



Ahahahaha.

Words can't describe. This is comedy genius. You must write more. I beg of you. And don't improve your English; this is great stuff my friend. You are a GOD.




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manpudding!!! you are now my all time favourite writer :) :) i loved this!! your crazy little awesome imagination is pure genius!! DONT EVER STOP WRITING :)
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Hello Manpuddin!!

They didn't saw me

The only thing I would change is this, 'They didn't see me' The 'saw' to 'see'.

I also agree with Prokaryote! You made me smile!
But, I think it's great how it is! :D

Keep up the awesome work!

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Great work, Manpuddin! You're really creative and I loved this piece. I really hope you write more later. Until next time!
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