Don't question

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"The end of the world is cliche. I look down and see a book that tells how the world will end. I look up and see the face of the one explaining the story to me. I look forward, straight forward, and never look back. I'm not afraid of the world's end. We don't know if life even will end, but don't question.
And what if it's already ended? How can we know that we aren't just dreaming, rocketing forward in time as we lay on our deathbeds? There's no way to tell. There's no way to know, for a certainty, that the crazy people locked away in in the asylum are really crazy. There's no way to tell that their rambling is false, no way to tell if the dead walk among us or not. No way to tell if the girl who throws herself to the ground in front of me, sobbing violently, can really see them, hear them. Do they speak to her? Do they speak to us? Maybe they do and we just aren't listening. Are you listening? No. You think they're gone, but there's no way to know...but don't question. If you can't see the answer, don't go in search of it.
No way to know that the reflections in the mirror aren't conscious. No way to know if the world will end when the ancient calendar does. No way to know if the person sitting on a street corner screaming warnings can really see the future. Stop condemning the crazies to the secluded life in the asylum. Maybe we can see the future. Don't question. Let us go. Let us all go. Let us all go now. Do you hear me? LET ME GO! LET ME OUT OF HERE! I DON'T BELONG!" My calm demeanor melted away in an instant. "LET ME OUT!" I screamed this over and over as the guards dragged me to my cell. They called it a room, but I couldn't- I can't leave it. After they slam the door shut and lock it tightly, they stroll off.
When their shift ends, they can just drive home. They probably have families waiting. They probably think they're going to go home tonight, maybe in a few minutes.
I keep screaming as I beat on the door, as I claw away at the clear, glossy finish. The finish that is just flammable enough in liquid form.
I understand it now. I understand it all. I know why my brain made me hide away the lighter under my bed. I drop a few scraps of the glossy finish in my half- filled water glass. Then a few more scraps. Then even more. Soon there's equal amounts of finish and water in the glass. It will take a few days to melt, but when it does, I'll escape. Mere arson is not enough for me. I'm leaving the asylum in style.
I'm not crazy. I can see the future. Don't question me.
A falling star fell from your heart and landed in my eyes. I screamed aloud as it tore through them and now it's left me blind.
Florence and the Machine, Cosmic Love




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I don't know how realistic this is D: I don't know if that finish stuff they use on doors is really flammable, but it's what ended up written. feel free to offer ideas on different endings. (after the dialogue part. I like that.) well, in any case, it was fun to write.
A falling star fell from your heart and landed in my eyes. I screamed aloud as it tore through them and now it's left me blind.
Florence and the Machine, Cosmic Love




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Very intresting and revealing on life. Its always been a good question to ponder about whether or not the people in asylums are the insane ones. But then again, this entire story was about not questioning things! I like how the main characther becomes trapped herself by others, knowing that she isn't crazy herself. The ending is very climactic and adds some thrillingness to it. I think the idea of the character burning down the asylum creates a sinister mysteriousness. Amazing story! :)




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Thanks! I just want to say this again. I don't know if door finish is flammable. DO NOT try this at home OR to escape the asylum you're locked up in.
A falling star fell from your heart and landed in my eyes. I screamed aloud as it tore through them and now it's left me blind.
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Dude. DUDE. Minds think A like, I was JUST writing on a workshop Idea from a year ago (In a few days I'm putting it up, I did NOT copy this I swear.)

I love it, intelligence at work with the paint, and the last line was great. "Don''t question me." This whole piece has given us a very good window in to her head, truth, not truth, what they think, love it. Anymore chapters I am so reading.
'I am the monster in your head.'~ Breaking Benjamin.
"Little voice I thought I got ride of? I have some advice for you: SHUT. UP."~ WolfDancer.




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This was really interesting, I especially liked the beginning. All your questions and comments about the end of the world and people labeled as crazy. It made the narrator sound... sane? I feel like you lost something at then end, but I really have no suggestions, sorry. Anyway, it could be improved, maybe bring it back to the beginning with the whole end of the world thing? I mean, was the guy in the asylum in there because of claiming to see the future? Just clear that up a bit and this will be a wonderfully good story. :) As it is, it's still pretty wonderful.
A non-writing writer is a monster courting insanity. -Kafka

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I like the flow of consciousness you employ in the piece. It gives us an inside track to this persons psychosis, and by person, am I wrong to think this is a women? I think you can use the setting of the story as your ally, and I would recommend you read Yellow Wallpaper sometime. It is a very similar setting and feeling. I think you can play with this work and really do whatever you want with it, and in the end the really important thing is that you are happy with your work.

Thanks for sharing
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