Well, this story did not make all that much sense, but maybe I did not start from the beginning. Over all, it was well written and the grammar was very accurate. I do want to comment of the "a thousand G's and L's", though. I realise it's a figure of speech, but both letters only had three words. Then again... I suppose 'man of three G's' doesn't sound very impressive... Good work, otherwise.
No, it's not that you didn't succeed. You accomplished a lot, but, if you want to touch people, don't concentrate so much on rhyme and metre. Think more about what you want to say instead of how you're saying it. — LCDR Geordi La Forge
