I'm really confused with what is happening in your story. I mean ... what..? Everything seems everywhere, and pretty random. Maybe you should slow down a little more and explain things more thoroughly, 'cause I don't have much of an idea of what's going on. And cutting the number of exclamation marks and the length of the ellipses would be good, too.. C: Happy writing,
~EmmaJane~
Your = Possession. Your shoes are so sweet! You're = Omission. You're quite strange...
If you are confused about which to put, simply say in your mind "you are" and see if that fits the sentence. If not, you are looking for your.
