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Falling apart



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Sun Apr 25, 2010 1:17 am
SisterItaly says...



IDK what to rate this, its kinda depressing... tell me what you think its the first one ive ever written~ its a little embarassing-spelt wrong- :oops:

Im falling apart
tearing at the seams
why is everything so dark
when your away from me
Hold me together
because you are my glue
without you I dont know what ide do

I need to be held
in the saftey of your arms
Because when im with you
I feel safe from harm
You stitched me back together
But now you pull away
Why are you doing this to me
you said you were here to stay

Im falling apart
tearing at the seams
why is everything so dark
when your away from me
Hold me together
because you are my glue
without you I dont know what ide do

Im falling into pieces,
and he picks them up
Putting them back together
with-out much luck
I wish you were here
I want you to come back
Cause without you
he just picks up the slack

Im falling apart
tearing at the seams
why is everything so dark
when your away from me
Hold me together
because you are my glue
without you I dont know what ide do

He'll hold me together,
but it wont last long.
Im saving my breath
for my last song
Because i cant last much longer
Youve made everything i know wrong

He'll hold me close
but you held me closer
He'll keep me up
but you kept me higher
He'll make me laugh
but you made me laugh harder


Im falling apart
tearing at the seams
why is everything so dark
when your away from me
Hold me together
because you are my glue
without you I dont know what ide do

I knew it was to good to be true
I thought i fell for you
The way you make me feel
Everything has become unreal
Come back and say it
one more time
Then ill fall apart
Cause your not mine





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Sun Apr 25, 2010 4:46 am
dasiamari says...



This was really good
Know that she's back in the atmosphere I'm afraid that she'll think of me as a plain old Jain told a story 'bout a man who was to afraid to fly so he never did land. ~Train





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Tue Apr 27, 2010 3:24 am
ireylcadence says...



Very nice. I'll bet you you can put that on metrolyrics and no one would even notice it's not a real song. ;)

Are you going to put music to it? It'd be great if you could. The words flow so well that they actually seem like they are music in itself. Great job.
The wittiest thing is the simple truth.





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Sun Jul 17, 2011 7:03 pm
evfreak13 says...



Awww...I really liked this! Are you sure this was your first try? I mean, it's preeeetty good! :)

More than depressing, I felt it was more dejection, desolation, and remorse. I was especially moved by it for, err, personal reasons... ;) I really really liked this stanza
He'll hold me close
but you held me closer
He'll keep me up
but you kept me higher
He'll make me laugh
but you made me laugh harder


There were a couple of grammar mistakes but that can be fixed later! Overall, I really enjoyed it and nice job! :D
This will be our reply to violence: to make music more intensely, more beautifully, more devotedly than ever before.
Leonard Bernstein .








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