Young Writers Society

Hello everyone! This is part of a song I wrote for my book "How We Rock". I've also created a lyric video for this song if you wanted to check that out as well: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s2dQ6i-7i0U Tell me what you think:)

Lyrics:

I've been locked in a tower
Nobody rescued me
I've been here for hours
Week after week
Another X on the calender
Same old, same old routine
I'm painting over this picture
I'm changing my scene

Let me out
On my way
I can't find my place
In this cage
This is not my fate
Need to get away

Chorus
I wanna fly
Spread my wings and go
I'll touch the sky
When I find the key to set me free
I wanna run
Kick the chains away
There's no better feeling than running on my two feet
Free

This was really cool sounding. It had a great flow and I kind of just wanted to sing along as I was reading it. The song was really pretty.

The only thing I disliked was how it kind of jumped all over the place from different topic to different topic. So, as great as it was if I was listening to this on the radio I'd have wanted to play it back to listen to the lyrics again.

I like how it ends, it's very releasing, very free indeed. Overall it was very nice.

Keep writing! I'd love to read another song by you.

Good luck,
TLM

Hey its Giselle
This is really good, it have a great flow. Sorry if I didn't say much I'm kinda in a hurry ;P. Keep up the good work.

Hey Cy!
This looks really good, I didn't really find any grammatical errors. Keep it up!

why did you say ( This Old, This Old dream)

I really like these lyrics. I, myself, am a songwriter. The lyrics you have posted have a smooth, flowing rhythm inside it.

Keep it up. You are doing great

Thank you guys for the reviews and feedback! It feels good to put yourself out there and get a great response:)

Wow! I love this song! It's so realistic and touching! Brilliant!