Young Writers Society

This song is about this guy I've had a crush on for nearly 3 years now

Nah, nah, nah
Nah, nah, nah

Never will you see the day when I will be there
Sitting by you watching as the days go by
I was a bit scared of loosing you
wondering why I had to wait so long to see.

I can say how I really feel,
as we're sitting, waiting for the bell to ring
the moment when I though this could be it
I got scared and just walked away,
Wondering how I really feel.

Chorus:
Do you remember when I first looked at you
the time when you smiled and turned away,
I remember, I remember that day
You are the best thing that's ever happened

Every day went by as fast as you could say
every moment became a memory
I remember when you first spoke to me
with that sweet talk, I thought it was a fantasy

But you changed and had a new girlfriend
I didn’t know what I was supposed to do
It was hard but I got through it
then I remember I didn’t have to let you go
Nah, nah

I knew it was right for me to hold on
Nah, nah

Chorus:
Do you remember when I first looked at you
the time when you smiled and turned away,
I remember, I remember that day
You are the best thing that's ever happened


I hope you remember that day when I said I liked you
the day that will never end as I still do
You made my life feel like a dream come true
Just because I got to meet you

nah, nah, nah, nah

And I remember at 11:15, when you walked in for the very first time
on that Friday when the sun shined brightly
my eyes lit up with butterflies, as I looked into yours
I never thought this could be true
But then again I got to meet you.

I never wanna say goodbye because I thing I’m falling for you
Wish I could show you that all of this is true
you said it would be better just being friends
But this feeling is too strong to let go

You said that it would be better like this
But I didn’t know what to do
But all I wanted is you to be happy
I would never wanna try and hurt you
And I would never wanna forget about you

I can say how I really feel,
as we're sitting, waiting for the bell to ring
the moment when I though this could be it
I got scared and just walked away,
Wondering how I really feel.

And this is saying that I love you always

OK, first off you need to figure out what your chorus is. When you do, separate it from the rest by putting the word CHORUS in bold above it or by makin the chorus a different color than the rest of the song.
Second, the 'nah nah' part, to me didn't make sense, but maybe that's just me but I think you should take it out. But, I should tell you that I am a completely random and crazy person, and as always, you don't have to take my advice, it's just there. This is just my opinion, and since this is your song, I'm just a fly on the wall. But trust me, I have a lot of experience in thse matters.

Abi wrote:this song is about this guy I've had a crush on for nearly 3 years now

Nah, nah, nah
Nah, nah, nah

Never will you see the day when I will be there,
sitting by you watching as the days go by,
I was a bit scared of loosing you,
wondering why I had to wait so long to see.

I can say how I really feel,
as we're sitting, waiting for the bell to ring,
the moment when I though this could be it
I got scared and just walked away,
Wondering how I really feel.

Do you remember when I first looked at you
the time when you smiled and turned away,
I remember, I remember that day
You are the best thing that's ever happened

every day went by as fast as you could say
every moment became a memory
I remember when you first spoke to me
with that sweet talk, I thought it was a fantasy

but you changed and had a new girlfriend
I didn’t know what I was supposed to do
It was hard but I got through it
then I remember I didn’t have to let you go
Nah, nah

I knew it was right for me to hold on
Nah, nah

Do you remember when I first looked at you
the time when you smiled and turned away,
I remember, I remember that day
You are the best thing that's ever happened


I hope you remember that day when I said I liked you
the day that will never end as I still do
You made my life feel like a dream come true
Just because I got to meet you

nah, nah, nah, nah

and I remember at 11:15,
when you walked in for the very first time
on that Friday when the sun shined brightly
my eyes lit up with butterflies, as I looked into yours
I never thought this could be true
But then again I got to meet you.

I never wanna say goodbye because I thing I’m falling for you
Wish I could show you that all of this is true
you said it would be better just being friends
But this feeling is too strong to let go

you said that it would be better like this
But I didn’t know what to do
But all I wanted is you to be happy
I would never wanna try and hurt you
And I would never wanna forget about you

I can say how I really feel,
as we're sitting, waiting for the bell to ring
the moment when I though this could be it
I got scared and just walked away,
Wondering how I really feel.

And this is saying that I love you always

I think that you should put always before I love you in the last line.
I enjoyed the idea, but I didn't enjoy what was in it. It was good, but with work it could be great.

You have immense stalker qualities in yourself. This song was really awful (and I write a lot of awful songs myself). It just seemed to drag on and on. Why do girls get so dramatic over a stupid crush?