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Wed Feb 23, 2011 11:19 am
daye says...



I look outside my window frame,
I see nothing but the whole world going insane,
hey you there!!!am talking to you;
yes I said your name,
how could you give away your soul;
and sell it for fame? shame.
there's no place to call home,
going home is like;
throwing off a far stone,
yes!!! I remember now;
they call it the war zone,
callous,menace own,
armageddon zone.I wanna know.
who built this empire of fire,
like a high voltage flowing through them wire,
let my words come like rain,quenching all the fire,
creating resistance and never ever tire.
All I have,
all that I am;
I give to one sole goal,
I give to you;
I give to all of those who wants to know,
that I've gat an aim,
not for fame,
but to melt those chains,
and free yo'all from all your pains.
We fight for one love one heart,
once lost now we have;
the chance to make our children proud,
so when we grow old,
they can stand bold,
and say some day I'll love to be like dad.
This soldier's getting stronger,
knowing that we are weaker,
we're born to fight,
trained to kill,
about to die,
but never will..
***CHORUS***
This' a far call,this a far cry,
How can we go home?when there's no place to call home,
All we need is
One love yeah,yeah
All we need is
One love,love.
This' a far call,this a far cry,
We can go home.If we build one of our own,
All we need is
One love yeah,yeah
All we need is
One love,love...
Last edited by daye on Thu Feb 24, 2011 3:52 pm, edited 2 times in total.
  





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Wed Feb 23, 2011 5:43 pm
Upile says...



Hey I'm not a pro in reviewing raps but I'll give this one a try. It flowed nicely so that's a thumbs up for you. I know rap forgets rules and grammar and just lets the music speak to them. But a lot of people nag about 'I's not being capitalized and all so you might one fix that before they jump on your case. Just warning a brother. :)
Anyways good job.
Keep it up.
xx Upile xx
  





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Mon Feb 28, 2011 6:05 pm
lele253isme says...



cool someone. I like it. are you a rapper you need talent to perform that rap
  





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Tue Mar 01, 2011 1:32 pm
Abi says...



cool song i like it when you put rap into songs like eminem lol
  








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