Young Writers Society

Here it is
Here it fucking is
The cause of you stuck in the abyss
Down you go
Down you fucking go
Erase all thoughts of him that you know
Because forgiving is bullshit
and not forgetting is legit

~Chorus~
Go, Go - You should have kept your hands to yourself
Down, down - You deserve the same hell that you gave
Go, Go- Now the record buttfucks you every chance that it gets
Down, down- Where are you going to find a gun now?
Go to hell

Go, go
Down, down

Will your own creation turn against you
For the speak always finds its way back to retell the action
There's no denying or changing the rules
Here comes guitly bullets, and automatic self-subtraction
Will you ever break free the chains of shame?
Fucking souls see you as a device of potential pain
So...

(chorus)

Oh here it is
here it fucking is
The cause of you stuck in the abyss
down you go
down you fucking go
Erase all thoughts of him that you know

(chorus)

Because forgiving is bullshit
and not forgetting is legit
or is forgetting bullshit
and not forgiving legit?

(chorus)

Will he be forgiven?
Will he be forgotten?

Note:
you can listen to the clean version of this song at http://www.ourstage.com/tracks/GWQLTJCJ ... -same-hell

I really liked this.

I am not a huge fan of putting cuss words into song, but somehow here I thought it really worked. It doesn't look/sound forced at all.

Go, Go- Now the record buttfucks you every chance that it gets

I don't understand this line, but....

Anyway, keep writing.

Kay

It's referring to someone who has a criminal history and in this case someone who has a criminal history because of a sexual crime

Again, sorry I'm so lazy and taking so long to review.

Anyway, I finished my review on your other song, and unlike that song, I think the anger and swearing worked much, much better here! I actually can't find much wrong here that's worth pointing out, but I'll say it anyway because otherwise it wouldn't be much of a review: Work on flow. What makes things easy to listen to is flow. Your style of music, but make the words flow into each other so that they all seem to tie into one idea, rather than several different ideas of the same general category, if you know what I mean.

Hope I helped!

>>Annie<<