Duet: Just One Dance Please?

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I thought this would be a fun song. I thought about Johnny Cash and June Carter singing it. It may be awful but I think it's fun! :elephant:
Duet: Just One Dance, Please
Guy: Girl, I haven't seen you here before in this place,
But I see you have spice and some southern grace.

Girl: Unlike you honey, you're a dancing disgrace!
I think you're drinking too many to keep up my pace.

(Chorus)
Girl:Besides, boy, I'm outta your league!
Guy: Oh, girl, just one dance please?
...........................................
Guy: Mind if we do a fast jig on the floor,
Spin you around and do a little twirl?

Girl: Nope, honey find you another girl,
I've already been taken by a man who's name is Earl.

(Chorus)
Girl:Besides, boy, I'm outta your league!
Guy: Oh, girl, just one dance please?
................................................
Guy: Well, can Earl strum a six string like this?
Or give you such as this: a big ol' kiss?

Girl: You better back off, or I'll kick you where you piss!
You sure don't know how to treat a little miss.

(Chorus)
Girl:Besides, boy, I'm outta your league!
Guy: Oh, girl, just one dance please?
...............................................
Guy: What's it gonna hurt, can't you tell?
As soon as I seen you, my heart just fell.

Girl: Well, I didn't mean to put you under my spell,
With my piercing green eyes and my raspberry smell.
...............................................
Guy: Oh, beautiful, I'll even right you a song.
Girl: Well, maybe I might have been a little wrong.
Guy: You see girl, it ain't so bad.
Girl: But this might make Earl really mad.
Guy: I'm sure glad you gave me a try.
Girl: Here comes Earl, this is our goodbye.
Guy: When will I see you ever again?
Girl: Well, honey that really depends....
Besides, Boy, I'm outta your league!
.......
Boy: Oh, girl, one last dance please?
Girl: I'm outta your league.
Boy: One last (one last) one last dance please?
Girl: Oh, no, no, no.....
Last edited by Hydey on Wed Apr 28, 2010 2:54 am, edited 1 time in total.
“Take one fresh and tender kiss
Add one stolen night of bliss
One girl, one boy, some grief,
some joy Memories are made of this.”
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I- I can't stop laughing! This was really funny! And imagining Johnny Cash And June Carter just made it even better! You got some talent here!
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Thank you sooo much zebraskittles! :lol: I'm not used to doing lyrics but I'm learning.
“Take one fresh and tender kiss
Add one stolen night of bliss
One girl, one boy, some grief,
some joy Memories are made of this.”
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Haha, this was great! Good rhythm.
Hydey wrote:Girl:Besides, boy, I'm outta your league!
Guy: Oh, girl, just one dance please?
Lol, this is going to be stuck in my head for a while!
I love how she's kinda falling for him in the end, and changing her mind.
You sure do have talent! Keep on writing-

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That is really fun. The only thing that stood out though was the line "I've already been taken by a man who's name is Earl" sounds a little awacard. Maybe you can do something like "I've already bean taken by a man named Earl" or something like that to make it a little smother. But otherwise, that was good.




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I agree. Thank's everyone!
“Take one fresh and tender kiss
Add one stolen night of bliss
One girl, one boy, some grief,
some joy Memories are made of this.”
Johnny Cash



Pain is filtered in a poem so that it becomes finally, in the end, pleasure.
— Mark Strand