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Sun Sep 11, 2005 3:53 pm
Harley says...



when you see your reflection in the back of your acoustic guitar
and you listen to the voice inside you telling you who you are
you see a different person staring blankly straight through you
it's impossible to face it: everything you see is true

time will face your fear
love me, leave me,
keep me near
our hearts beat in time
soulful, tuneful
rythym sublime

when your hopes turn out false and you need someone to understand
when my fingertips freeze and you warm them in the palm of your hand
and as the darkness falls there's so many more questions to ask
there's a strom in my heart as i leave the safety of your grasp

time will face your fear
love me, leave me,
keep me near
our hearts beat in time
soulful, tuneful
rythym sublime

a conversation overflowed with elipses
a worthless dream filled with your soft kisses
an endless struggle to prove that i can beat this

time will face your fear
love me, leave me,
keep me near
our hearts beat in time
soulful, tuneful
rythym sublime

time will face your fear
love me, leave me,
keep me near
our hearts beat in time
soulful, tuneful
rythym sublime
love will set us free
kiss me, kill me
make me see
make me see
you make me see
all that i could be
  





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Sun Sep 11, 2005 4:59 pm
Firestarter says...



Holy moly that was good.

Very poetic.
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Sun Sep 11, 2005 6:57 pm
Empress Kat says...



wow. I loved it. Good job.
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Sun Sep 11, 2005 8:29 pm
Emma says...



Very nice! I love it to bits.... Honestly...

DAMN YOU FOR BEING SO GOOD!
  





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Mon Sep 12, 2005 5:26 pm
Harley says...



=) thanks peoples. probably the first song that really meant something to me, so it's good to see y'all like it.
  





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Tue Sep 13, 2005 1:02 am
Areida says...



Wow. I don't think I've ever read any of your lyrics before, but dang, girl, that was incredible! I wish I could hear the tune if you've got one in mind, or even just hear it put to music. It was really really beautiful.

Only mistake I noticed: "there's a strom in my heart" Did you mean storm?

I especially liked this line: "when my fingertips freeze and you warm them in the palm of your hand".

Amazing. Really amazing. Can't believe you're thirteen... what is it with this site and young geniuses? I mean honestly! First Sam, now you... Yeesh.
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Wed Sep 14, 2005 5:47 pm
Harley says...



Wow, being compared to Sam. *is honoured*

(and not in the sarcastic way- sam rocks :))
  








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