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Thu Apr 29, 2010 2:14 am
Areida says...



Hey Kamas! I'm pretty useless at critiquing poetry, but I really like the NaPoWriMo threads, so I figured I'd check out a few. :)

I just read #24 and #25, and I definitely like #24 better. #25 doesn't seem to fit with the song - the narrator sounds lonely, but the song is so happy! Did you use them as inspiration, or more like background music? Maybe I'm missing the point. I love #24 though, especially "skyward gospels in a mug." Awesome. :D
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Thu Apr 29, 2010 2:44 am
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They're just the songs I listened too when I wrote them. Sometimes they're inspired from the song, sometimes from a line in the song, sometimes it has nothing to do with it :P

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Sat May 01, 2010 5:26 pm
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How disappointing. D:
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