Learning the Truth (Chapter 2)

I opened the door and slammed it behind me. Jacob flinched because of the unexpected noise. He looked at me with worry. “Hailey, what’s wrong?” he asked. Okay, he noticed I’m freaking out. Well, it is kind of obvious. “I-I-I j-j-j a-a-a” I was stammering and panting. No wonder I couldn’t get my words out.

“Hail, take deep breaths.” I did what he instructed. He put his hands on my shoulders. “Now, tell me what happened.”

“I think I just… blew up a… bolder with…my mind.” His eyes widened and got this confused look on his face. After a while, he spoke. “Are you sure?” he asked. I nodded. He nodded too. “You what to talk about it?”

“Sure”

“Okay. You sit down and I’ll be right there.” I nodded and headed for the couch and sat down. Jacob came back with a glass of water in his hand and he handed it to me. “Here, you look dehydrated.” I took the glass. I intended to just take a zip, but somehow I ended up drinking the entire glass. I was so busy freaking out; I didn’t realize I was so thirsty. “Okay now, tell me everything.”

I took a deep breath. “Okay, I was at the river washing the clothes, just another day. When I was finished, I saw this huge bolder across the river. It caught my attention for some reason, so I started staring at it. I felt weird. I felt… heat come out of my mind. In a matter of a second it literally blew up. It all happened in a second, but in that second I felt… powerful. It was scary.”

I could see it all in my head, repeating it over and over. I could feel the tears coming. “It’s gonna be okay Hail.” said Jacob pulling me into a hug. “Everything’s going to be fine. There’s no need to be scared. This is part of who we are. All we need to do is learn to control it. And as long as I’m here, we’ll do it together.”

I looked up at him and smiled. “Thanks Jacob.” Suddenly he was a blur. I looked ahead to make sure. I was getting hard to see the room. Uh-oh. I lost complete site of the room. “Jake I’m having another vision.” I told him. He hugged me tighter. “Where are you this time?” he sounded kind of worried. “Um, in that alley again. There’s even more fog than before. Wait… I here something. Something like… footsteps.

It all went blank. I couldn’t see anything. Then slowly I could see my house again. “It just stopped.” I whispered. Jacob nodded. I was quiet for a minute. Then Jacob let go realizing he was still hugging me. I completely forgot he was hugging me. It just felt so nice to be there. His arms around me- Whoa where did that come from?! I don’t think of Jacob that way!

I could feel myself blushing. Why am I blushing?! I have nothing to be embarrassed about! Uhg! Jacob shot up from the couch. “Uh, I have to go. Take a walk. I‘ll be back later.” He took his hoody (that was still wet) from the basket on the floor and left.

I just sat there for a second. Jacob was to was to serious when he left. Happy go lucky Jacob isn’t like that. Something must be bothering him. I’ll ask him when he gets back. I got up from the couch and picked up the basket. I walked to the back of the house and hung the clothes so they could dry.
After I was done hanging them I walked back inside. I walked to my room and took the one of my books I have: Pride and Prejudice. They gave it to us at the orphanage. They gave us these two books. This one and the bible. I kept them both. Jacob only kept one. Guess which one.

I sat there on the living room couch. I opened the book and started reading. I couldn’t get passed the first sentence. I read it over and over again. You’d think I’d get sick of reading: "It is a truth universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a good wife."

But I didn’t even notice. I just kept thinking about the serious look on Jacobs face. Seeing it over and over in my head. I’ve been friends with Jacob for ten years, and I’ve never seen that look before. It was weird. Not normal. Not Jacob.

After an hour I gave up on reading. I decided to start dinner. At that second Jacob came threw the door. He was out of breath and panting. He also had this… freaked out look on his face.

“What happened Jacob?” I said, very worried. “I accidently broke a brick wall.” he said, just as freaked and out of breath. “Wait, what? What do you mean by ‘I accidently broke a brick wall’?”

“I mean that I accidently broke a brick wall. Don’t ask me why or how, because I have no idea.”
I walked toward him and face him. It was quiet for a while, we just stared at each other. We didn’t say a word. I was confused. I didn’t know what was going on. This is weird. That word seems to describe my life, weird. I wanted to say something but I couldn’t. It was, like, impossible to speak. No matter how much we tried.

I saw in his hazel eyes that he was just as confused as I was. I wish I could have seen what happened. See what he meant…

Hey, wookielover17! Thanks for the PM; I probably wouldn't have realized that this was up here if you hadn't told me.
Now both Hail and Jake can make things explode with their minds... I like the sound of that. I liked how you kind of added that twist in there; I expected Hail and Jake to have completely different powers, since Hail sees stuff and Jake's skin changes.
Okay. I'm just going to do my classic 'ripping-your-writing-to-shreds' thing:

I opened the door and slammed it behind me. Jacob flinched because of the unexpected noise. He looked at me with worry. “Hailey, what’s wrong?” he asked. Okay, he noticed I’m freaking out. Well, it is kind of obvious. “I-I-I j-j-j a-a-a” I was stammering and panting. No wonder I couldn’t get my words out.

First off, you've got to remember to start a new paragraph every time a new character starts talking. You do that throughout your writing; it's a habit that I'm pretty sure everyone has had, at one point or another. Just a tiny thing in this paragraph... I think that when you have Hail stammering like that, you should have the j-j-j form into an actual word. Also, you should put a last hyphen before the quotation marks, just to add a sense of finality to it:
I opened the door and slammed it behind me. Jacob flinched because of the unexpected noise. He looked at me with worry.
"Hail, what's wrong?" he asked.
Okay, he noticed I'm freaking out. Well, it is kind of obvious.
"I-I-I j-j-just a-a-a-" I was stammering and panting. No wonder I couldn't get my words out.
You see what I mean?

I intended to just take a zip, but somehow I ended up drinking the entire glass.

I think that you might have meant to say 'sip' there.

I was so busy freaking out; I didn’t realize I was so thirsty.

You don't need the semicolon there, you can just have a regular comma. Figuring out where and where not to put semicolons is so annoying...

“Okay, I was at the river washing the clothes, just another day.

The way Hail said 'just another day' sounded a bit rehearsed, and besides, it took place only about three minutes before. It just sounds a little... odd... in casual conversation.

In a matter of a second it literally blew up. It all happened in a second, but in that second I felt… powerful.

I get why you used the word 'second' twice in the second sentence, but you could use another word in the first sentence. You could say: In a matter of moments it blew up. You also don't need the 'literally' in there; we know she's not joking around.

I could see it all in my head, repeating it over and over.

You might want to try replacing the first 'it' with 'the image,' referring to the image of the boulder exploding (by the way: 'boulder' is a rock, 'bolder' is being more bold), and then you can throw away the second it: I could see the image all in my head, repeating over and over.

“It’s gonna be okay Hail.” said Jacob pulling me into a hug.

Here's another habit that most people have: if you're going directly from quotations into something like he said/she said/I said, you can just have a comma, even if it's the end of a sentence. Also, you have to separate 'Hail,' which is a proper noun, from the rest of the sentence with a comma. Lastly, after you say a he said/she said/I said, if you're adding more details in, you need a comma. Confusing? I know. It would look somewhat like this: "It's gonna be okay, Hail," said Jacob, pulling me into a hug.
I'm just going to edit the things in this paragraph:

I looked up at him and smiled. “Thanks, [comma there] Jacob.” Suddenly he was a blur. I looked ahead to make sure. I was getting hard to see the room. Uh-oh. I lost complete [s]site[/s] sight of the room. “Jake, [comma there] I’m having another vision, [comma, not period]” I told him. He hugged me tighter. “Where are you this time?” he [capital there] sounded kind of worried. “Um, in that alley again. There’s even more fog than before. Wait… I here something. Something like… footsteps." [you forgot quotation marks]

Then Jacob let go realizing he was still hugging me. I completely forgot he was hugging me.

You need a comma after the 'go' in the first sentence. It's because the first half of the sentence could stand on its own, but the second half couldn't. It's called dependent and independent clauses. Ask an English teacher for more info... anywho, in the second sentence, you might just want to change the wording a bit, to put it into past tense. Maybe: I had completely forgotten he was hugging me. Also, you used 'hugging me' twice within the space of two sentences; try different words there.

He took his hoody (that was still wet) from the basket on the floor and left.

This is mainly a suggestion. You can get rid of the parenthses there and add commas like this: He took his hoody, which was still wet, from the basket on the floor and left.

Jacob was to was to serious when he left. Happy go lucky Jacob isn’t like that.

You didn't use the right form of 'to' there. The form you used would be: We're off to see the Wizard of Oz. You need 'too,' which would be like: I ate too much pizza; or Me, too! Also, happy-go-lucky has the hyphens in there.

I walked to my room and took the one of my books I have: Pride and Prejudice. They gave it to us at the orphanage. They gave us these two books. This one and the bible. I kept them both. Jacob only kept one. Guess which one.

You don't need the 'I have;' we can already surmise that she has the from the fact that she said 'my books.' And you see those three sentences I underlined? You can combine them into one, like this: They gave us this book and the Bible [capitalized] at the orphanage. Then, at the last sentence, it's a question, so you need a question mark instead of a period.
Also... erm... I'm sorry, maybe I'm not reading this closely enough, but I can't figure out which book he kept. Neither of them sound very interesting...

At that second Jacob came threw the door.

You should add a comma after 'second,' and you need 'through,' not 'threw.' 'Threw' is like: I threw a ball.

I walked toward him and face him. It was quiet for a while, we just stared at each other.

You should have 'faced him,' not 'face him,' since you had 'walked' almost right before that. Also, in the second sentence... semicolon, not comma.

I was confused. I didn’t know what was going on. This is weird. That word seems to describe my life, weird.

Okay. In the first two sentences, the words that I underlined made it seem like the story was taking place in past tense. In the last two, the words I underlined made it seem like present tense. Try not to mix up your tenses, or people will get confused.
Okay. I basically just gave you an overview of little things that you have to edit. Overall, I really like your story, and no matter how much I try, I can't get this random image of Jacob blowing up a brick wall out of my head... I think that's a good thing.
There's one thing that confused me, though. Why was Hail so confused at the end of the story? She had just blown up a boulder, and she was shocked and confused as to how Jacob had blown up a brick wall? If anything, a brick wall would probably be easier to blow up... (don't ask me how I know this).
Anywho. I liked this section, and keep writing!

Hello wookielover. Okay so, first I have to say awesome. I was a little lost because I didn't remeber some of the stuff, sorry. I'm going to have to read chapter 1 again. I thought that Jacob holding on to Hail a little longer than necesary was so...aw; and her reaction to that was cute to. I'm not going to be a good sister and not do the whole ripping your work to chreds thing, just because I'm feeling generous today. Loved the chapter keep writing.

P.S. You can post your CL story on the fan fiction section.

Its Vamp here I love the story its cool.