Because - Chap. 27

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I'm back!

This was another good chapter and I didn't see any grammatical errors or anything but then again I'm so excited. Imagine what this will look like on bookshelves in Borders and Barnes & Nobles and all the other book stores!

Okay, anyways, I liked this chapter it was really good and I feel that we get more inside Becca's head than in any other chapter. This was a nice touch to the story and I'm just upset that you left us with a cliffhanger!

Well talk to ya later,

~Angel

“No,” I answered. “Most of the dreams are different. They’re all on the same night, but he never says the same things, or does the same things. I only see what really happened that night once in a while.” I had yet to see it again—I was talking about months before, just after we’d moved to Colorado. The dreams that had invaded my mind only days before were all lies, just imitations of what could have happened… what might have happened if they hadn’t found us.

This paragraph leaves me confused. I think you are just forshadowing the climactic scene where he comes and beats up James, right? So in that case, I shouldn't really know what's going on, right?

Congratulations, I am so happy for you! I hope all goes well! This is a great story; it deserves to be published. I can't wait for more!

Congratulations! I really hope you can get your story published! I know I'll go and buy a copy (and tell my friends to all go buy one too!). Good luck!
I know I haven't commented on any chapters recently, but I've definitely been following. It's getting really good, and I feel like you're drawing up to some sort of climax, and I can't wait to see what happens! I didn't notice any grammatical errors or anything, like the others said before me, so I think you're good to go with this chapter. Once again, congratulations! I really hope it works out for you, you're an amazing writer! Keep up the good work.

Hey, KJ! And congrats!
I enjoyed this one too, but I've come to expect that. This one is a bit slower than the rest, but I liked it because it gave us a look further into Becca's mind. Plus, I admit I have a difficult time remembering things between every few chapters, so this was a useful reminder of things that have happned.

Mom had felt it necessary to bring me to one more session before her and Dad left for New York, so that I was "completely sound" while they were away. Actually, it should be "she and Dad."

Not wanting to look at her expectant face anymore, I transferred my gaze to her slicked hair. It was so perfect, as if not one of her hairs dared to misbehave. Lol, that made me laugh!

I also really like how Becca feels about her mom. She mentions that song her mom used to sing as she tucked her in at night, and strengthens the idea of how much she really cares about her. I like that she's trying to protect her mom, even through her own moments of weakness.

That's it, then! Best of luck to you!
--Anna

This isn't the end is it? There is still more, right? Because I have a ton of unanswered questions and it seems like Becca has officially lost it. This isn't the end. Right? I want more! I hope there is more. I can't wait to read more. Oh, and congratulations about possibly getting it published. I'd buy a copy. PM me when you post more. PLEASE!

Please! Pm me with you get teh next chapter!!!!!

Hey KJ!
Another brilliant chapter done by you!
*standing ovation!!!*
Honestly, if this book ever gets published,
Send me a copy,
Even though I live all the way in Singapore XD
I'd totally buy it.
Like your best friend, you have a flair for writing,
Which makes me an icky shade of green, with sheer envy.
~Please PM me when your next chapter comes out!
I'll be waiting

I just read the entire thing and I loved it. I really hope it gets published, or you post more of the story. I really want to read the rest. I want to see if she gets back with vick and what happens with will. ooohhh I just want to read more.
Good luck with getting it published. it is amazing.