Bitter Sweet- Chapter Four

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eviscerate your fragile frame
spill it out in ragged form
a thousand different versions of yourself.




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i think its a cute chapter.

Yes, this boy belonged in the second grade

haha, what boy doesnt?


But one day he’ll, be wrinklier and wiser than I.”

i dont think you need the comma after "he'll"


I said with an incredulously.

you might want to say something like, "I said incredulously"
or maybe "I said with an incredulous voice" or something else.
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Holly-
This chapter seemed a little odd to me. Maybe because it was too short, but it was cute for Mae's birthday.
I want to know what's going on with Mae's dreams, her mom, and the kids at school. And what happened to Wiley? Her was there for a second and now gone.
Sorry, if this didn't seem much of a review. But you really have me intrigued with this sorry. It's so captivating.
-Merry
Mary had a little lamb. Little lamb. Little lamb!

Ugh!! I really hate my name. >.<



Twenty years from now you will be more disappointed by the things you didn't do than by the ones you did. So throw off the bowlines, sail away from the safe harbor. Catch the trade winds in your sails. Explore. Dream.
— Mark Twain