This is (at least part of) the Prologue of my new story Life's Story. I need some harsh critiquing for this story..
I don't know if this is going to be a fantasy story or a science fiction story or a good old action/adventure story. I'm going to keep it here until I figure that out. (Sorry I thought I might say that in case I decide which and you can find it here)
Flynn ran across the barren waste land, he had only one destination -- the hideout. He heard dogs barking in the distance and men yelling at each other. Flynn just had to get to the other side of the river and he was home free, but fate gave him no such luck. Half way to the river he looked behind him. The dogs where much closer then he had thought. He thought of his younger sisters and brothers he had been banished and kept from helping them. Now it was up to Westley, in two years he would be old enough to take care of the younger siblings. And he would never be heard from again. Of coarse when one family member was considered a trouble maker the rest where already branded as so.
Flynn quickly took out his cell phone, he would send the information to Westley too keep safe. He pressed send just in time as he looked up he was heading strait for a tree. To late to avoid the tree he ran right into it, the cell phone finished sending the information as the first dog came up to Flynn.
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