The two ran for what seemed like days but was only a few hours. Khor could no longer feel the presence of the dead but he knew they would be searching for them. The trees eventually became fewer and they could at last see daylight.
They came out upon a large rocky cliff overlooking Cyte. The Shade sat down and was obviously breathing hard. Khor stood at the edge and looked down. It was at least seventy feet to the bottom. Khor looked out and saw large smoke pillars rolling out of the city below them.
He turned around and saw the Shade was standing. “!” A black force field surrounded the Shade and Khor half-smiled. “I still don’t trust you Shade.” Khor walked past him. He glanced back and remembered he was magically tied up and surrounded. He left the cliff and returned to the forest.
Khor returned to the cliff a few hours later to find the Shade with his back to him, sitting with his legs crossed. He returned with firewood and soon set ups a blazing fire and set up a reasonable shelter.
He cooked his food before nightfall and ate it in the dark so the fire and smoke wouldn’t alert the dead-things. He felt the eyes of the Shade stare at him while he was eating his strip of meat and his bottled water.
Tired of having eyes on him while he ate, he eventually turned his back and finished his diner. When he returned his attention to the Shade he was still staring at him. He stood and put away the knife he used to eat.
Completely drained of magic Khor didn’t have time to set a barrier to conceal their hiding spot or protect it. “Well, goodnight Shade.” He then lay on the sheet of rock and attempted to get comfortable. After lying awake for several minutes he eventually fell asleep.
Unseen to Khor, the Shade reached into his black skin and retrieved the tiny piece of mirror, the only thing he really had left. He gazed at it for several hours and soon drifted off to sleep. While still wondering what things the new day would bring.
The morning brought the smell of smoke and a dark sky. Khor awoke early and looked up. The sky was completely dark, with clouds still swirling over the city. He also noticed the city was still burning, there were only wreckages left. Sitting in the center of the city, near the tower, was the humongous dead.
The city was still completely crawling with the smaller dead. It looked as if the remains of the city were moving because of all the dead-things crawling over everything. Khor turned back to look at the Shade who had his eyes closed and was apparently muttering something.
Khor walked over and tapped Melden on the surface of the field. It pulsed at the touch of the cold metal. The Shade glanced up momentarily, only to return to muttering. “What are you doing?” Khor asked leisurely. The Shade didn’t respond and continued muttering. “I’m going off to explore…” said Khor lamely. Dang it, now I’m talking to it! Khor rubbed his forehead and walking into the forest.
I don't know...it's probably not worth making clearer. It's okay as it is.
Just work on smoothing out your sentances so it flows better. Your dialogue is much better than it was in the first bits.
