So I've read all your post about this story and think it's pretty good, apart from it being a complete rip off of the werewolf things from twilight minus the vampires it's pretty good if a bit predictable. I can't really think of much else to say. I would say push yourself this longer. it all good to have a good writing style but if your chapters are 3 pages long then it defeats the point. Anyway story good.
So thing to changes:
*Originality *length of chapters *explain the characters thoughts more (this will also help with the chapter length.)
just because its about shape-shifters doesn't mean its a rip off twilight. Where do you think steph meyer got her ideas from? there's plenty of novels about shape-shifters, they're just not that well known. there's no such thing as an original idea anyway
their is it's just not this, and anyway don;t take it so personally I was just pointing out the facts. Plus it's not just because their shape shifters. I'll list the points
*Your female werewolf shape shifter thing is unaffected by the alpha males and females rank *They communicate without speaking *Their all in packs except some
I didn't mean to bash your story so don't take it that way, I was just saying what every OHNEST reviewer is thinking. I actually like your story it was just that one bit.
