Young Writers Society

This was an interesting story. I always love a good virus/apocalypse story. Through I couldn't find really any problems with it, I'm only a newbie to reviewing.

This story will have alot of depth in the way you write and you write well. I don't want to rush the story or any thing but what exactly is the virus?. I mean obviously it kills but that's all we know. So I would put more charistics in the virus itself like how it kills or what causes it.
I hope this will be some help to you.

This story has great potential which you have shown through your attention to detail. You have carfully though about the 5 W's (Who, Where, When, Why and What) essential to written and theatrical work. I congratulate you and wish you the best of luck.