My Lame Inking-more added 10/22/07

This is Hunter from Dono's story.
I'm very new to this inking business. And I drew too close to the bottom of the page and cut off his boots. Oops.

Dono also inked this picture... he'll probably be posting his soon.

Nice! Well proportioned, ut there's something stiff with his shoulders. And you can see the pencil lines in his very well done hair.

Very dramatic.

I'll second the shoulderness. But, the rest of it is actually very well done! What pen type did you use?

I think there is a disproportionate amount of shading on the face compared to the body. It's good though, the face looks a little odd, but all in all it's good.

The shoulders are a little stiff; round them out a little more. This guy isn't standing at attention on the parade ground, He's showing off his pieces.

The legs could be a little longer too. Maybe I'm looking at it wrong- he might be standing in some fog- but leg-to-body height ratio tends to be about 1:1.

I like the shading, it's pretty good. The windswept hair is good. The pencil lines don't bother me, they make it look like there are real strands in there.

Keep up the good work.

Cool, I hate he's missing his boots, but the top part looks great. He is a little stiff, not to bad, but it could be loosened up a bit. I can't find where his knee meets his thigh, it bothers me cause no one has completely straight legs.

Other than that, looks cool. So dangerous.

He actually has his full upper body flexed. Shoulders, arms, and chest. That explains the size and stiffness of his shoulders...

The hair looks very cool and the starkness of the white and black work with his pose. If you wanted things to be more round/break up the big chunks of dark or light, you could do a tiny bit of crosshatching where you still have pencil lines [folds, lighter shadows, stuff like that]. But that might change the feel of the drawing.

I love the hair and the outfit is very well drawn so long as you ignore the missing boots but I think the shadow for the nose is a little large. Great guns though and excellent work on the hands. It's really very well done!

Finally got the gust to try and shade this thing. Advice? Do you like it? And he's suppose to have boots, i drew too close to the bottom of the page... oops me.

He's a little bit oddly proportioned, for a person, but the shadowing out helps some. I think that his shoulders are too stiff-looking... now, I could never draw a shoulder very well, but I think that you could. Maybe if you curved them a little? Whatever shoulders do when they're looser. Maybe it's all in how you look at things.

Also... he looks like he's got a little bit of a, well, bosom. I think it's the lines on the shirt. If a guy was wearing a shirt like that, I don't think the fabric would stretch like that.

Hope I made at least some sense.

Peace, love, chocolate,
Muffin