Loners

Hey, good to read this. I really like the message it's passing especially as I can relate to it. But I feel you could have got under the skin of loneliness a bit more, not just write what everyone can see infront of them in lonely people but write what they don't see, get right ito things.

spy0h wrote:Everyday in my way home, I see people who sets a lone crying, no friends, no lovers, no family, no one who cares for them, that really hurts me, I mean to see a person like that who feels so lonely in life.

- this is ok, its just it doesn't grab you from the first moment.Try something more deep and dark. Because the topic of loneliness is really dark.

spy0h wrote:Some of us might make fun of them and call them names that really hurts, those worlds will make their lives more miserable that it is right now, I believe that everyone of us most help one and make them feel like they have someone, that they have a reason to live, and make them feel like that they are not alone in this life

- this is just stating the obvious. I feel you could write something far more interesting.
But I love your topic and the picture. keep writing, i think you have a talent that needs to come out. God bless you

Thank you, I agree with you that I must right more deep, but I was on a hurry because of my driving lesson, so next time I promise you to do better.

Hi, spy0h. I would give you my opinion of this, but I'm not sure what you want to do with this. Is this the beginnings of a short story, or just an artistic commentary? Also, I'm not sure, did you draw/paint that picture?
Otherwise, I like the vividness of this, so keep up the good work!

It's only the beginning so ya I need time, I should clarify that before.
sorry again

I truly love this picture. The writing like noted above, could use some deeper insights but i won't repeat that. Great art!

Thanks buddy =)