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Scavengers (Scene Five of Ten)



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Wed Feb 24, 2010 7:10 am
Vasticity says...



Due to a drop in actors, I had to rewrite. Three characters have been taken from the film.

Scavengers (Scene Five)

(We cut to Adrian and Cody, in the garage. Adrian is working underneath the car, while Cody paces back and forth for a few moments, then finally sits on the floor)

CODY:
I don't understand, how did he get the proper parts? I mean, there's a lot of different moving materials in a gun.

ADRIAN:
He melted materials down, then made the parts from the liquid metal.

CODY:
But how could he could he have formed them properly--

ADRIAN:
Cody, if we waste time thinking about how he did it, we're never going to get to work on stopping him from doing...

(Adrian grunts, and a metal piece clanks to the floor. He slides out from underneath the vehicle)

ADRIAN:
(Sighing)
...Whatever he's going to do.

CODY:
What do you think he's going to do, anyway?

ADRIAN:
Ah... knowing Norman? Burning the whole damn city down. But before that, he's going to try to kill me. For sure. That's just what he does.

(There is suddenly a knock at the door. Cody stands up, and answers the door)

CODY:
Yes, what is it?

MAN:
There was a sighting. Norman and Calvin were spotted outside of the south entrance, but Calvin headed into the outskirts, and Norman left shortly afterward.

CODY:
Why didn't you sound the alarm right away?

MAN:
We thought it odd that they didn't access the main entrance, so we decided to document what they were doing.

CODY:
All right, back to your post.

(Cody shuts the door, and walks back)

ADRIAN:
Why would they be in the outskirts? And why just Calvin?

CODY:
Is there anything out there?

ADRIAN:
Some old houses, but that's about it.

CODY:
Well, there's been no report of him coming back, so I'd assume Calvin's still out there.

ADRIAN:
I'll head out tomorrow. Tell the scouts to be on 24-hour watch, with priority focused on that area.

CODY:
All right.
Last edited by Vasticity on Sat Apr 10, 2010 8:17 am, edited 5 times in total.
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Thu Feb 25, 2010 12:36 am
ErBear says...



Hey Vast-izzle!

Sorry I haven't reviewed sooner- I finally got around to it!!

MAN:
What do you want, Adrian?

ADRIAN:
Hi, Louie. Where's Calvin?


I know that the man is Louie, but just specify because some people may be confused by the whole man = Louie information.

ADRIAN:
How 'bout I throw you off the bridge?

What bridge? Specify.

NORMAN:
The hottest ever recorded was 172 degrees. Nobody goes out there, even in winter, because it's still dangerous, due to the radiation.


Info dump. Drop "due to the radiation"

We cut to Adrian, now down to his T-Shirt, with his coat wrapped around his head. He is stumbling forward. We cut to Adrian, walking past a group of cars.

Did you want to say someone else's name? You said 'we cut to Adrian' twice.

The camera focuses in to a house in the background)

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Great script! Yay Vast-izzle!
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Thu Feb 25, 2010 3:02 pm
skutter11 says...



Wow! Have you concidard contacting the BBC after writting it all? (If you don't know, the BBC is the British Broadcasting Corporation) It would be something to think about...
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