Five days in the life of a nobody. Act1 scene 2

Act 1 – scene 2/4
Performance time: Scene 1 - 8minutes (entire play 60mins).

Rob –

Morning … love… hmmm
*Giggles a little to himself*
I’d ask you if you wanted some tea ‘n’ toast – ooh! I alliterated.
*Laughs*
But, erm, of course you can’t eat what I’d end up making for you through a DVD; unless they come up with taste’a’vision… which I don’t see happening too… soon.

* Awkward silence – scans the room*
Hope I didn’t disturb you too much with the snoring! LOL…
*mumbles*
“Lol”?

I don’t even know why I asked you whether or not the snoring bothered you or not – it’s getting edited out… hmm.

I’ve to go to work in a little bit, but I just though I ought to say “good morning” to you – Good morning!
*Gestures*
Oh! My job – well I’m a web solutions and development consultant. I’m self-employed and I work from home, but I have an office so it’s all very formal and professional.
In Fact! I’m working on a website for a fitness company, so I’ve got all of their literature lying about the office, so I think I’ll get to a gym and try it all out. Get ready for Rob the super stud by the time you’ve watched this DVD.

*Pause*

Well, realistically you might not get hold of this DVD for about three weeks… Perhaps not long enough to become Brad Pitt. Women Like the Pittster I take it… hmm.

*Coughs*

I’ve got a few videos with Brad Pitt in it, he’s quite a good actor – I’d rather have his wife though!
*Laughs*
But of course!
*Urgently corrects himself*
You’re; whoever you are, much better than Angelina Jolie… She’s…Ugly.

*Pause*
Anyway my love, must be off to the grind. See you later on.

* Stands up, walks over to the bed and straightens out the sheets before heading stage right *
*Lights out*

Three words my friend:

taste’a’vision

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!! I freakind died at that part! Oh my gosh! This is hilarious. I read the first part, I think I remember commenting on it, but I mean I may not have. I really don't remember the last few days for some reason haha.

Although, I do remeber reading the first part which was also funny. I really like this character. I really want you to stay true to him and who he is. If you are having trouble with your character you can always make a character chart or go to the character group.

Um, towards the end I got that this was supposed to be a dating movie? Like his application video or soemthing? If not, you may want to clariffy.

Seriously though, this is great. I dunno if you have more posted or what but I definatly want to hear more. I love it.

In the words of the Illustrious Tim Gunn: "Make it Work" [because I love it!]

--Rory

I love this character! His voice is coming across so clearly and his sense of humour is to die for. I assume that he's making some sort of video diary for a dating service or something? I would love to see this live -- I think it would be even funnier! I'm wondering where the real conflict is going to come ... as amusing as it is to listen to Rob natter away to a camera about being a nobody, I presume something significant is going to happen to him over the course of these five days? I have no idea what it is, but I'm looking forward to finding out.

My only real critique at this point is to watch where you capitalise letters -- only for proper nouns and at the start of sentences. But then again, that's just from a reading standpoint and I tend to zoom in on trivial little nitpicks like that.

Looking forward to the next scene!

Taste`a`vision`????? I fell out of my chair laughing when I read that!
Your character has a great sense of humor, and the voice you gave him comes through nice and clear.