This is my poem "The Storm", so let me know what you think of it!
The Storm...
The sounds of the roaring thunder, and the quickening flashes of lighting, the pitch black sky, not a sight, not a sound, but the storm… The rain crashing down against the windows, the wind pushing against the shutters and the on going sounds of sirens… all this commotion is it but a nightmare, or is it reality? Or is it of total dementia? Whatever the reason, my head twists and turns, all these emotions, all the rage and sadness, within me. My mind lies within The Storm.
*EDIT*
Hey, thought I'd re- post this, in lined form so it's easier to read. I have edited some things, from the original.
The Storm...
The sounds of the roaring thunder, and the quickening flashes of lighting, the pitch black sky, not a sight, not a sound, all but the storm.
The rain crashing down against the windows, the wind pushing against the shutters and the on going sounds of sirens… all this commotion is it but a nightmare, or is it of reality? Or is it of total dementia?
Whatever the reason, my head twists and turns, all these emotions, all the rage and agonizing sorrow, that fills me. My mind lies within The Storm.
By the way: The poem in quotation form, is the "original" version.
First of all let me just say that i loved this poem! It was very descriptive, however short. Even though this was a great poem all in all it seemed like it was lacking some more in depth adjectives to describe the scene. You used quite a view verbs and description words but it almost seems like you were using a simple language that was a little too simple.? That may just be me though. 
