Cannibal

Her warm blood
massages the inside
of my thoat.

It's sickly aroma
swims around
the trapped space.

I dig my nails
deep into her arm,
and pull out another chunck.

I squeeze her heart,
emptying all the chambers,
into my thirsty mouth.

I lift her up
and bite into her neck,
tearing away her pale skin.

Her ribs break beneath my knee,
the cracking is a symphony to my ears;
such a perfect sound.

I throw the devoured corpse
into the road,
and contemplate what will I have,

For dessert.

Excellently, disgusting! watch out for spelling errors. "bit to bite, desert to dessert, thirst to thirsty" other than that, excellent job! it was gruesome and raw and disgusting.

Ha! The end part is awesome

And this poem... it made me feel sick. Is that the effect you were going for?
And the way you'd described everything was almost, er.. beautiful? I don't know. Perhaps, "Perfect, and Twisted" describes this pretty well.
I liked this
I think you've spelt "Cannibal" wrong, by the way. That's the only thing. So...
Please don't eat me Xx

I absolutely loved this! It was right down my alley for favorite type of writing! It was deliciously gruesome and the words delicately placed. The spelling was a little off but of course that was probably just typos. The definition was divine with the self fulfilled glory. "Cannibal" almost reminded me of The Silence of the Lambs . Once again great! Loved it.

retrodisco666 wrote:deep into her arm,

emptying all the chambers,
into my thirsty mouth.

I throw the devoured corpse
into the road,
and contemplate what will I have,

I picked out lines that had commas that really didn't need them.

Other than that, I have no criticism for this piece. The subject is definitely not down my alley, and by that I mean I've never thought this way, so whatever you write is pretty effective in my mind xD This poem made me a tad queezy... you did a really good job of expressing the images in this. Sort of makes me wonder what exactly inspired you to write about cannibalism Anyway. Great piece of writing you have here Keep it up!