To Ride a Snowflake

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KiroSevin
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Mon Dec 20, 2010 8:03 pm
KiroSevin says... · Mon Dec 20, 2010 8:03 pm
I really didn't know which category to put this in...so this is my best guess, haha.
One of my first poems (of the few I have). Inspired by a car ride down some snowy streets. Just a cute little imagery ^_^
Let me know what you think!
-K7

To Ride a Snowflake

If I were lighter than a snowflake,
I really do believe,
The beauty of the snowflake,
Would be easier to see.
The only problem I can think of,
If I could ride a snowflake,
I would be so very tiny,
The wind would carry me away.
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Mon Dec 20, 2010 9:24 pm
Justagirl says... · Mon Dec 20, 2010 9:24 pm
Aaah!! This poem is so cute! I love it the way it's short, sweet and simple. The ryhming makes it even better (I stink at rhyming...)!!

Keep writing!!
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Tue Dec 21, 2010 4:32 am
cupcake says... · Tue Dec 21, 2010 4:32 am
Short and sweet. I like it. Keep writing! :)
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Tue Dec 21, 2010 5:43 am
squirt886 says... · Tue Dec 21, 2010 5:43 am
To Ride a Snowflake

If I were lighter than a snowflake,
I really do believe,
The beauty of the snowflake,
Would be easier to see.
The only problem I can think of,
If I could ride a snowflake,
I would be so very tiny,
The wind would carry me away.[/quote]
bold letters= lower case
slanted part= make it anoter verse
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KiroSevin
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Tue Dec 28, 2010 4:18 pm
KiroSevin says... · Tue Dec 28, 2010 4:18 pm
Thanks to all for the comments/suggestions!!
"You can judge a nation by the way it treats its animals."-Gandhi
"War is what happens when language fails."-Margaret Atwood
"The true meaning of life is to plant trees under whose shade you do not expect to sit."-Nelson Henderson
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